Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-25
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The bar graph illustrates the final result of a survay about perfomance of hot beverages buying and drinking in five cities at Austraila during one month.
Overall the large number of people love to went to cafe for coffee or tea while lowest number of people prefer to buy new coffee. Similar trends have seen in all cities.
Initially, Most people would love to went to a cafe for coffee or tea and out of five cities Melborne ans Hobart accounted higest percenage value, ollowing as 64% and 63%. While Sydney, Brisbane and Adelaide respectively, 61%, 56% and 49%. Approximately same values accounted for Brisbane ad Adelaide for bought freshd coffes from cafes which were lowest performence.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response fails to reach the minimum 150-word requirement, stopping at only 117 words, which significantly limits the development of the task. While the candidate attempts to provide an overview and mention some specific data points from the chart (such as Melbourne and Hobart having the highest café visits at 64% and 63%), the reporting of data contains notable inaccuracies and confusion. Specifically, the student confuses buying fresh coffee with going to a café and misinterprets the categories. Furthermore, key trends across the three categories (fresh coffee, instant coffee, and café visits) are not fully covered, resulting in a partial and underdeveloped response.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5
The text is divided into three short paragraphs, attempting an introduction, an overview, and body details. However, the logical progression is severely disrupted by confusing sentence structures and poor referencing. Cohesive devices are either misused or absent, and transitions like 'Initially' and 'following as' do not function correctly. Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal cohesion within the sentences and between ideas lacks clarity, making the response difficult to follow.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is basic, repetitive, and often unnatural. There are frequent spelling and word-choice errors, such as 'survay' for survey, 'perfomance' for performance, 'Austraila' for Australia, and 'Melborne ans Hobart accounted higest percenage value'. The candidate struggles with appropriate terminology for describing statistical data and trends, relying on phrases like 'love to went to cafe' and 'lowest performence', which greatly restricts the range of vocabulary.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
Grammatical control is weak throughout the response. There are persistent errors in basic sentence structure, tense usage, and prepositions, such as 'people love to went to cafe' and 'Similar trends have seen in all cities'. Complex structures are attempted but are almost always faulty (e.g., 'While Sydney, Brisbane and Adelaide respectively, 61%, 56% and 49%'). Punctuation and article usage are also problematic, resulting in frequent errors that impede clear communication.
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