Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar chart illustrates the propotion a result of a survey that people buying and drinking coffee and tea in five different australian cities . Coffee or tea is more consuming item. But the fresh coffee is less consumer item in australian cities. In sydney last 4 weeks fresh coffee is less consuming approximately 43% , instant coffee consuming approximately 46%, and and went to a cafe for coffee or tea more consuming approximately 61%. In melbourne last 4 weeks frseh coffee , instant coffee and went to a cafe for coffee and tea consuming only 42%, 47% and 63%.In brisbane last 4 weeks fresh coffee, instant coffee and coffee or tea is consuming approximately only 34%, 53%, and 55.5%.In adelaide last 4 weeks fresh coffee, instant coffee, and coffee or tea is consuming apprroximately only 34%, 50% and 49%. And hobart lin last 4 weeks fresh coffee, instant coffee, and coffee or tea is consuming approximately only 34%,54% and 62%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The student attempts to cover all five Australian cities and reports data across the three categories (fresh coffee, instant coffee, and café visits). However, the overview is extremely weak, containing awkward generalizations such as 'Coffee or tea is more consuming item.' Furthermore, the data reporting is overly mechanical, repetitive, and lacks clear comparisons or synthesis of the main trends. While some figures are cited (e.g., approximately 43% for fresh coffee in Sydney, 53% for instant coffee in Brisbane), the overall development is limited and falls short of the higher band criteria.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response suffers from severe paragraphing issues, as almost the entire text is jammed into a single block with erratic and excessive spacing. Cohesive devices are minimal and repetitive, heavily relying on crude time-markers ('In sydney last 4 weeks...') that read like a robotic list rather than a coherent piece of writing. There is a lack of logical progression between sentences, making the text difficult to follow smoothly.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

Vocabulary is very basic and often unidiomatic or misused. For instance, the student repeatedly uses forms like 'consuming item' or 'is consuming approximately', which demonstrates a poor grasp of word choice and collocation. Spelling errors such as 'propotion', 'australian', 'sydney', and 'frseh' further detract from the lexical quality. The range of vocabulary is restricted and inadequate for a standard academic task.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

Grammatical control is weak throughout the response. The student struggles with basic sentence structures and verb forms, producing flawed constructions such as 'people buying and drinking coffee and tea' and 'went to a cafe for coffee or tea more consuming'. Punctuation and capitalization are frequently incorrect (e.g., lower-case 'sydney', 'melbourne', 'hobart'), and error frequency is high enough to occasionally impede clear communication.

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