Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The bar chart below illustrate the results of a survey about people's buying and drinking coffee and tea habits in five cities in Australia.
Overall, this survey indicates the pecentage of city residents buying and drinking tea and coffee in five cities Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane, Adelaide and Hobart in Australia.
The percentage of went to cafe or tea has the highest figure throughout the cities. Almost 61% people went to a cafe for coffe or tea in last four weeks.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response is severely under-length, containing only 80 words compared to the required minimum of 150 words. Because of this, it fails to present a fully developed overview and omits major categories of data from the chart, such as fresh and instant coffee purchases across the cities. While the student attempts to introduce the chart and highlights one general trend and a specific data point regarding café visits in Sydney, the lack of breadth and failure to complete the task pulls the score down into the lower bands. To improve, the writer must ensure all key features are covered and meet the word count requirement.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5
The response attempts to use standard introductory phrasing ('Overall, this survey indicates...') and structures paragraphs, but the overall organization is extremely brief and stilted. Cohesive devices are minimal, and there is a lack of logical progression between sentences. For instance, moving abruptly from the overall statement to the café statistic without a smooth transitional link disrupts the flow. Furthermore, referencing is slightly confused in sentences like 'The percentage of went to cafe or tea has the highest figure'. Paragraphing is also underdeveloped due to the brevity of the text.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, featuring restricted lexical choices appropriate for the task. Words such as 'survey', 'chart', 'people', and 'cities' are repeated without demonstrating a wide range. There are also noticeable lexical errors and awkward collocations, such as 'people's buying and drinking coffee and tea habits' and 'The percentage of went to cafe or tea'. These errors reflect a limited command of word choice and phrasing, keeping the vocabulary score at a modest level.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The text contains a very limited range of grammatical structures, consisting mostly of simple or poorly formed complex sentences. There are frequent grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, such as 'The bar chart below illustrate' (subject-verb agreement error), 'The percentage of went to cafe or tea' (incorrect clause structure), and 'in last four weeks' (missing article). Because the sentence forms are basic and error frequency is high relative to the short length, control over grammar is weak.
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