Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The bar chart illustrats the porportion of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits of several Austrilian cities .
Overall , went to a cafe for coffee or tea recorded the highest figure, whereas bought fresh coffee had the lowest figure by the whole period .
In details Sydney city ,the figure for went to coffee or tea recorded highest position and it takes over 60% . on the other hand ,fresh coffee and instant coffee took position around 43% and 45% . in addition, instant coffee took second position in there . in the area of melbourne and brisbane , fresh coffee decrease sli
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response is significantly under-length, containing only 109 words against the required 150-word minimum. This severely impacts task achievement, as the writer cannot fully develop or present all the main features of the chart. While the student attempts an overview and mentions some data points, such as noting that visiting a café recorded the highest figure, the summary remains incomplete and trails off mid-sentence (in the area of Melbourne and Brisbane, fresh coffee decrease sli...). Because the response fails to meet the basic length requirement and leaves the task unfinished, it falls into Band 4.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The text shows some basic organizational structure with an introductory sentence and an overview transition ('Overall'). However, the coherence is heavily disrupted by the abrupt ending of the text and poor paragraphing. Cohesive devices are minimal and sometimes awkward, such as 'In details' and 'in there'. The logical progression breaks down as the writing becomes disjointed and incomplete. Referencing is weak, making it difficult to follow the comparison between cities. Consequently, the organization reflects Band 4.0 descriptors.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive ('figure', 'position', 'took'). There are also multiple spelling and typographical errors throughout the text, including 'illustrats' for illustrates, 'porportion' for proportion, and 'Austrilian' for Australian. The student attempts some topic-related vocabulary like 'fresh coffee', 'instant coffee', and 'cafe', but the overall lexical range is limited and inadequate for a complete academic task. These lexical inadequacies and frequent spelling errors place this aspect in Band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting mostly of simple and attempted complex sentences that contain noticeable errors. Examples include 'went to a cafe for coffee or tea recorded the highest figure' (where a clause is incorrectly used as a subject noun) and 'it takes over 60%' (unnecessary tense shift). Punctuation and spacing errors are also frequent (e.g., spaces before commas and periods). Because the text is incomplete and contains persistent structural and grammatical errors, it earns a Band 4.0.
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