Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
This bar chart illustrate data regarding about people coffee and tea buying in five major Australian cities
Overall,it is clear that was the most dominant,while was the least. In addition, they went to a cafe for coffee or tea in last 4 weeks.
In Sydney, minimum amount of fresh coffee bought in last 4 weeks and Average amount of instant coffee bought in last 4 weeks therefore most of the people went to the coffee shop or cafe in Sydney.The second one is Melbourne, and their is same condition as for the first one. The third one is Brisbane , the fresh coffee level is low and instant coffee and went to a cafe remain almost same, and the fourth one is Adelaide the habits of buying coffee and tea is remain almost same to the last city .The final and last one is Hobart, the fresh coffee rate is much minimum then instant coffee and went to a coffee shop or cafe is higher than both others,
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response attempts to address the task by mentioning coffee and tea habits across five Australian cities, but it fails to present a clear, accurate, or complete summary of the visual data. Key features are severely muddled or completely missing due to fragmented sentences (e.g., 'Overall,it is clear that was the most dominant,while was the least'). While some cities are named, the comparisons lack precise data reporting, and the overview is incoherent. Furthermore, the description contains incomplete thoughts and mismanaged statistics, resulting in a performance that falls below the requirements for Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The organization of the essay is highly problematic. The response lacks clear paragraphing, with sentences strung together without logical transitions or cohesive devices. Cohesive markers such as 'The second one is', 'The third one is', and 'The final and last one is' are overly simplistic and mechanical. Additionally, referencing is frequently unclear or missing entirely, as seen in sentences like 'while was the least', where the subject is omitted. Progression is absent, making it very difficult for the reader to follow the flow of information.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The lexical range is extremely basic and repetitive, relying on rudimentary terms like 'amount', 'level', and 'rate'. There are severe vocabulary gaps and incomplete sentences where key nouns or adjectives are omitted ('minimum amount of fresh coffee bought... and Average amount of instant coffee'). Word choice is often inappropriate, such as 'much minimum then', which violates standard collocations and grammar. The vocabulary is inadequate for a coherent academic task.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The grammatical range is very limited, consisting mostly of poorly constructed, faulty sentences. There are frequent, fundamental errors including missing verbs, incorrect prepositions, and severe punctuation issues (e.g., 'This bar chart illustrate', 'habits of buying coffee and tea is remain almost same'). Complex sentence structures are either absent or attempted with high error frequencies that obscure the meaning. Basic subject-verb agreement and tense consistency are regularly violated throughout the text.
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