Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The illustrate chart shows the results of a survey about people. Who want coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities and give the percentage of city residents. There are Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane, Adelaide, and Hobart.
In Sydney and Melbourne bought fresh coffee in last 4 weeks percentage of city residents is 44 percent in Sydney as compare to the Melbourne it is 42 percent and instant coffee in last 4 weeks percentage of city residents is 46 percent as compare to the Melbourne it percentage is 48 percent and went to a cafe for coffee or tea in last 4 weeks residents percentage is 61 percent in Sydney and in Melbourne it percentage is 63 percent.
In Brisbane and Adelaide bought fresh coffee in last 4 weeks the percentage of city residents in Brisbane is 33 percent and in Adelaide it percentage is 34 percent and bought instant coffee in last 4 weeks in Brisbane percentage of city residents is 53 percent as compare to the Adelaide percentage of residents is 50 percent lower then the Brisbane and went to a cafe for coffee or tea in last 4 weeks in Brisbane it percentage is 55 percent as compare to the Adelaide it percentage is 49 percent it is lower then the Brisbane.
In Hobart bought coffee in the last 4 weeks it percentage is 37 and instant coffee in last 4 weeks it percentage is 54 and last coffee or tea went to a cafe in last 4 weeks it percentage is 63 percent.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The student attempts to cover the main data points from the chart regarding coffee and tea habits across the five Australian cities. However, the response lacks a clear overall trend or summary statement, which is a key requirement for Task 1. There are several inaccuracies in quoting the exact percentages compared to the prompt (e.g., stating Brisbane fresh coffee is 33 percent instead of approximately 34.5 percent, and Hobart fresh coffee as 37 percent instead of 38.5 percent). Furthermore, the data is presented as a dense, unformatted list of figures rather than a structured comparison. To improve, the student should include an introductory overview paragraph highlighting key general trends and ensure data points are reported more accurately.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5
The response is structured into four paragraphs, which shows an attempt at organisation. However, the progression of ideas is hindered by a lack of cohesive devices and extremely run-on sentences. For instance, the second paragraph consists of one extremely long, breathless sentence containing multiple clauses linked repetitively by 'and' and 'as compare to'. Paragraphing is attempted by grouping cities together, but referencing is weak, with frequent vague expressions like 'it percentage' or 'in Hobart bought coffee'. There is no overall logical progression guiding the reader smoothly through the comparison.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive. Phrases such as 'bought fresh coffee in last 4 weeks', 'percentage of city residents', and 'as compare to' are repeated constantly throughout the text. There are also basic word form and choice errors, such as 'The illustrate chart' (instead of 'illustrated') and 'Who want coffee' (instead of 'showing coffee'). The student makes little attempt to use less common vocabulary or paraphrase the prompt effectively, relying instead on lifting terms directly from the chart labels.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The grammatical range is extremely limited. The response is dominated by heavy, poorly controlled run-on sentences joined excessively by coordinating conjunctions like 'and'. There are frequent structural errors and fragments, such as 'There are Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane, Adelaide, and Hobart' and 'lower then the Brisbane' (incorrect comparative structure and spelling). Subject-verb agreement and preposition use are also problematic throughout ('in last 4 weeks' instead of 'in the last 4 weeks'). Errors are frequent and regularly strain the reader's comprehension.
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