Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-30
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The given bar chart illustrates the result of survey about people's coffee and tea buying and dhrinking habits in five Australian cities(Sydney,Melbourne,Brisbane,Adelaide,hobart)
Overall,people who go to cafe for drinking coffee or tea in last four weeks are comparatively higher than people who bought fresh or instant coffee in all cities. the lower pepole are intrested in buying fresh coffee.
To begain with, the citizen of melbouren,sydney,hobart are the highest percentage of people who are more intrested to go to cafe to drink coffee or tea
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, stopping abruptly at only 85 words. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed. While the student attempts an overview and mentions some general trends, such as noting that café visits were higher across all cities, the details remain extremely limited. Specific data points are largely omitted, and the text trails off in the third paragraph before fully developing the comparisons. To achieve a higher band, the writer must ensure the word count exceeds 150 words and provide a more comprehensive summary of the chart's main features.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The essay is divided into three very short paragraphs, but the overall structure is severely impacted by the lack of development and incomplete sentences. The writer uses basic cohesive devices like 'Overall' and 'To begain with', but paragraphing is ineffective due to the extreme brevity of the text. Progression is not fully established because the response cuts off mid-thought in the final sentence. Cohesion is faulty and mechanical, reflecting a low band descriptor for logical organization.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, with several spelling errors such as 'dhrinking' instead of drinking, 'intrested' instead of interested, and 'melbouren' instead of Melbourne. There are also capitalization errors for proper nouns like 'hobart'. While words like 'comparatively higher' are attempted, the limited range and frequent errors in spelling and word form severely restrict the lexical score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The response displays a very limited range of grammatical structures. There are noticeable errors in subject-verb agreement and article usage, such as 'the result of survey' missing an article and pluralisation issues like 'people who go to cafe for drinking'. The final sentence is incomplete, showing a lack of control over complex sentence forms. Errors are frequent relative to the short length of the text.
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