Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

This chart compares the percentage of five different cities of australia where how much people go to the cafe and buying coffee or tea.

Overall, five different cities in australia and maximum percentage of people is 75%. melbourne and hobart have highest rank in where 64% people are same for went to a cafe for coffee or tea in last 4 weeks whereas sydney shows 62%. brisbane and hobart accounted for 53% people bought instant coffee in last 4 weeks. brisbane and adelaide shows minimum number of people for bought fresh coffee in last 4 weeks.

melbourne illustrates highest number of people is 64% and sydney and hobart have minor difference of people approximately 2%. adelaide shows the equal number of people 50% are bought fresh coffee and went to go a caffee in last 4 weeks.sydney shows highest number of people 44% who bought fresh coffee moreover instant coffee user in hobart 54%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

The student attempts to address the prompt by comparing coffee and tea habits across five Australian cities, but the task achievement is significantly weakened by inaccurate data reporting and poor selection of main features. For example, the student claims that 'maximum percentage of people is 75%' and that 'melbourne and hobart have highest rank in where 64% people are same for went to a cafe', whereas the visual data shows café attendance at around 63.5% for Melbourne and 63% for Hobart. Furthermore, several figures are misstated or confused between categories, such as attributing 53% for instant coffee to Brisbane and Hobart when Hobart is actually around 54.5%. The overview lacks clarity and fails to effectively synthesise the overarching trends of the chart.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response is divided into three paragraphs, but the logical progression and overall arrangement are weak. The introduction is awkwardly phrased and fails to establish a clear overview. Within the body paragraphs, sentences lack smooth transitions, leading to a disjointed reading experience. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused (e.g., 'moreover instant coffee user in hobart 54%'), making the connections between ideas unclear. Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal coherence within paragraphs breaks down due to erratic jumping between different cities and data points without a clear comparative structure.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The lexical range is quite limited and repetitive, heavily relying on basic terms such as 'percentage', 'people', 'cities', and 'highest number'. There are frequent lexical errors and awkward collocations, such as 'where how much people go to the cafe and buying coffee or tea', 'went to go a caffee', and 'instant coffee user'. Less common vocabulary is attempted with very low accuracy, and word forms are often confused (e.g., using 'buying' instead of 'bought' or 'buyers'). These limitations occasionally impede the reader's understanding of the specific data points being referenced.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting mostly of poorly constructed simple sentences and faulty complex structures. There is a persistent lack of control over basic verb tenses, subject-verb agreement, and clause structures, as seen in 'where 64% people are same for went to a cafe' and 'adelaide shows the equal number of people 50% are bought fresh coffee'. Punctuation is also problematic, including missing sentence boundaries and lower-case beginnings where capital letters are required. Errors are frequent and often cause severe strain and confusion for the reader.

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