Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Australia is a country located between indian and pacfic ocean the country is known as one the most important countries located in the oceania the national animal of australia is kangaroo australia is known as one of the very first cricket playing nations in the world as we know coffee and tea have become one the most used drinks in the whole world these beverages are used for various purposes in the midevial times or in the past coffee was used as a medicine or was known to be a medicine after industrial revolution coffee was being used by the workers to make them work through night shifts with ease coffee has great amounts of caffine that causes the sleep to go away in the charts presented there are various percentages of people drinking coffee and tea on regular basis five cities are discussed sydney melbourne brisbane adelaide and hobart the people drinking coffee and tea varies with different percentages with freshly ground coffee instant coffee and coffee or tea from cafe first and formost in sydney 44 percent people bought fresh coffee in last four weeks 45 percent people bought instant coffee and more than sixty percent people went to cafe for coffee or tea In melbourne the percentage of fresh bought coffee is less as compared to the first city 42 percent people bought fresh coffee in last 4 weeks the number of instant coffee purchase went up in this city more than 45 percent of people buying instant coffee in last four weeks and cafe outing aslo went up in this city with 64 percent people went on to buy coffee or tea from cafes in brisbane the consumption of fresh bought coffee is lower than evvery other city with people buying fresh coffee are less than 35 percent instant coffee consumption is higher than the other 2 cities with people buying instant coffee are more than 50 percent but the cafe system in brisbane is less than the other two cities with people buying coffee or tea from cafe is at 55 percent in adelaide the fresh coffee consumption in last 4 weeks is about the same as brisbane the consumption of instant coffee is more than the first two cities with 50 percent in last 4 weeks but less than brisbane and number of peole buying coffee or tea from cafes is at the lowest in last 4 weeks from the other 3 cities in hobart the fresh coffee consumption has risen as compared to the last two cities but is less than the first two cities with people drinking fresh coffee in the last 4 weeks is at 38 percent the instant coffee consumption in hobart is the most from the last four cities with people buying instant coffee are at 54 percent and the people going to cafes for the coffee or tea is also went up as compared to the last two cities but is little bit less then melbourne with people going to cafes in last four weeks are about 62 percent

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

The response makes a partial attempt to address the task, but it is significantly hindered by a lengthy, irrelevant introduction about Australia's geography, history, and national animal. While the writer eventually attempts to report data for the five cities regarding fresh coffee, instant coffee, and café visits, the coverage is somewhat limited and lacks a clear, overarching overview. Some figures are approximated or generalised without clear synthesis, meaning the task is only partially fulfilled. To reach a higher band, the writer must omit all irrelevant background information, provide a clear introductory summary statement highlighting main trends, and present the data with greater accuracy and structure.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

Information and ideas are not arranged coherently due to a complete absence of paragraphing; the entire body of text runs together as a single massive block. While some basic sequence links are attempted, the lack of paragraph divisions and punctuation makes progression difficult to follow. References between ideas become unclear because sentences are mechanically strung together with repetitive conjunctions and run-on structures. To improve, the text must be divided into logical paragraphs, starting with an introductory overview followed by clearly grouped body paragraphs, while utilizing appropriate cohesive devices to signal relationships between ideas.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, relying heavily on simple phrases like 'bought fresh coffee', 'instant coffee', and 'people buying'. There are noticeable lexical limitations and some word-choice inaccuracies, such as 'cafe system' or 'fresh bought coffee'. Spelling and word formation are generally adequate for basic communication, but the range remains restricted and struggles to convey precise statistical information naturally. To achieve a higher level, the writer needs to incorporate a wider range of vocabulary, including less common lexical items, synonyms, and precise collocations related to data reporting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response demonstrates a very limited range of structures, consisting mostly of simple clauses joined by coordinating conjunctions or run-on sentences lacking proper punctuation. There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including missing capitalization, absent articles (e.g., 'went to cafe', 'at lowest'), and faulty subject-verb agreement or tense consistency. These frequent errors cause difficulty for the reader. To progress, the writer must focus on sentence boundaries, accurate use of punctuation, capitalization of proper nouns, and the control of simple and complex grammatical structures.

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