Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

the bar chart below ilustrate the percentage of city residents about people's coffee and tea consommation and drinking habits in five Australian citie

overall, we can observe that the consommation of coffee is more consedrable than tea in the majority of cities , ferthermore Sydney occupate the most high percentage of consommation comparing to other cities

indetail,the percentage of Holbart's resident consommation instant coffee is the most significant one for about 55% while the less significant one is Sidney's resident approximatly 45 the ,however resident of Sidney drrink fresh coffee more than the residents of other cities which approximatly 45% a

the other catifgories where much smaller in nd the last one is the resident of Hobart

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

The response fails to meet the minimum length requirement of 150 words, stopping short at 117 words. Furthermore, the selection and reporting of main features is very limited and heavily garbled. While the student attempts an overview and mentions a few categories such as fresh coffee and instant coffee across cities like Hobart and Sydney, the ideas are severely underdeveloped, confused, and prone to inaccuracies. The data reporting is incomplete, chaotic, and lacks a coherent summary of the visual information provided in the prompt, placing this criterion at a minimal level.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The text exhibits basic organizational attempts, such as starting with an overall phrase ("overall, we can observe that...") and transitioning to details ("indetail, the percentage..."). However, information and ideas are not arranged coherently. Paragraphing is absent or poorly managed, forming one messy block of text. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused (for example, "ferthermore", "indetail", and "the ,however"), leading to a lack of clear progression and making the logical relationships between sentences difficult to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, with numerous spelling and word-form errors that strain the reader's understanding. Examples of lexical and spelling inaccuracies include "ilustrate", "consommation", "citie", "consedrable", "ferthermore", "occupate", "Holbart", "Sidney", and "catifgories". The writer attempts to use topic-specific vocabulary related to the chart, but poor control over word choice, spelling, and collocation restricts the response to a limited, inadequate range.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

Grammatical control is weak, featuring a very limited range of structures. The text is riddled with frequent errors in verb forms, missing auxiliary verbs, incorrect prepositions, and faulty sentence boundaries (such as run-on clauses and sentence fragments like "which approximatly 45% a"). Punctuation is largely neglected, and basic agreement rules are frequently broken (e.g., "the other catifgories where much smaller in nd the last one is the resident of Hobart"). These frequent errors cause considerable difficulty for the reader throughout.

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