Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

INTRO:

The line garph illustrates the result of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in australian cities of Sydney,melbourne and Hobart.

OVERALL:

It's we can seen overall went to a cafe for coffee or tea in last 4 weeks.Melbourne,Sydney and Hobart in this city highest buying coffee or tea buying in cafe.Other two city buying but lowest.

Bought instant coffee in last 4 weeks the highest rank have two city hobart and brisbane is buying instant coffee.Other buying but compare these two city is lowest.

Bought fresh coffee in last 4 weeks highest Sydney and melbourne other buying as compare these cities is value decrease.

If we compare moslty people wents to cafe and buying the coffee or tea.Other people instant order he take the order and go over work or go to home and drinks.Hobart,preople is high

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response responds to the task only minimally and tangentially, failing to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words by stopping short at 143 words. While the writer attempts to discuss the data from the chart, the information presented is extremely fragmented and lacks proper development. The overview is confused, and the selection of main features is very limited and poorly communicated. Key data points are missing or inaccurately generalized, and comparisons between the five Australian cities are barely attempted. To achieve a higher band, the writer must ensure the response meets the minimum length requirement, provides a clear and accurate overview of the main trends without getting bogged down in disjointed fragments, and fully reports and compares the data for all relevant categories across the cities.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

Information and ideas are not arranged coherently, resulting in a text that is difficult to follow. Although the student uses structural headings like 'INTRO:' and 'OVERALL:', the actual organization lacks a clear logical progression. Cohesive devices are largely absent or misused, leading to a series of disjointed sentences rather than a smooth, unified report. Paragraphing is not used in a standard essay format, and referencing between ideas is frequently unclear, such as abrupt shifts between cities and coffee types. To progress, the writer needs to structure the text into standard paragraphs with a clear introduction, overview, and body sections, using appropriate cohesive links to guide the reader through the comparisons.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, heavily relying on words directly copied from the prompt such as 'coffee', 'tea', 'buying', and 'drinking'. There are noticeable lexical errors and awkward word choices, such as writing 'line garph' instead of bar chart, and phrases like 'highest buying coffee' or 'instant order he take'. These errors and the limited range of vocabulary strain the reader and impede clear communication. To move to a higher band, the writer should develop a wider range of vocabulary suited to describing statistical data, including synonyms for buying, consuming, and preferences, while avoiding spelling and word-form errors.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response shows a very limited range of grammatical structures, consisting mainly of simple, fragmented, or poorly formed sentences. Errors are frequent and often distort the intended meaning, such as 'It's we can seen overall went to a cafe' and 'preople is high'. There are severe issues with verb forms, subject-verb agreement, missing articles, and awkward punctuation or capitalization (e.g., 'australian', 'Sydney,melbourne'). Complex sentence forms are either absent or attempted with frequent errors that cause significant difficulty for the reader. To improve, the writer needs to demonstrate control over basic sentence construction, ensure proper verb tenses and agreements, and eliminate frequent structural errors.

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