Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar chart illustrates the result of a survey about peoples coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in

in five cities of australia.

However, The many peoples are went to a cafe for cofee or tea in last four weeks.

The peoples are went to cafe for cofee and tea buying and drinking habits in five cities in australia. The first onr city is sydney the almost 44% peoples brought fresh coffee in last four year and 45% are peoples are coming buy instant coffee and next people went coffee or tea on buy cafe above 60%. And the next country is melbourne the percentage off fresh coffee is almost same to sydney and bought instant coffe people are coming almost 44% and nymber of peoples are rapidly increasing went cafe to buy coffee and tea in last four years. So the next two cities is Brisbane and adelaide the peoples percentage are almost same 35%. The peoples are coming to bought fresh is same country.And also move on the next step is instant coffee the percentage of brisbane is approximatealy 53% and adelaide is 50%.The quantity of people are wnt cafe or buy tea or coffee in brisbane is 51% and adelaide is quantity is increasing and almost 48%.However the last and fifth city is hobart the percentage of instant coffee and went cafefircoffee and tea is equally same both cities and people buy fresh coffee in hobart is almost 43%.peoples are went cafe for buying coffee and tea is famous thing in four cities besides adelaide.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

The response makes an attempt to address the prompt by mentioning some figures from the chart, such as pointing out that around 44% of people in Sydney bought fresh coffee and noting data for Brisbane and Adelaide. However, the response only minimally and tangentially responds to the core requirements of Task 1. It fails to provide a clear, coherent overview of the main trends and makes numerous inaccurate references to the data, such as confusing time periods (referring to 'last four years' instead of 'last 4 weeks') and misinterpreting categories and cities. The information presented is fragmented, lacking a structured overview and failing to make the necessary overall comparisons across the five Australian cities. To reach a higher level, the writer must select key features accurately, present a clear overview statement, and report figures without factual distortion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The text lacks a logical overall organization and progression. Information and ideas are presented in a jumbled manner without clear paragraphing, creating a single dense block of text that is difficult to follow. The response relies heavily on repetitive sentence starters like 'The peoples are went...' and 'And the next country is...', making the flow mechanical and confusing. Furthermore, cohesive devices are used inadequately and inaccurately, resulting in disjointed transitions between cities and categories. To improve Coherence and Cohesion, the writer needs to organize the response into clear paragraphs, such as an introduction with an overview followed by body paragraphs grouping related data, and use appropriate, varied cohesive links to guide the reader smoothly through the comparisons.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, heavily relying on words provided directly in the prompt such as 'coffee', 'tea', 'buying', and 'drinking'. There are frequent errors in word choice, word form, and collocation, including awkward phrasing like 'bought fresh coffee people are coming' and 'went cafefircoffee'. These lexical limitations and errors place strain on the reader and impede clear communication. To achieve a higher band, the writer should build a wider range of vocabulary appropriate for academic data reporting, such as verbs and nouns to describe trends accurately, and pay closer attention to standard collocations and correct word forms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The response demonstrates a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying almost entirely on simple sentences that frequently break down. Errors are frequent and often distort the intended meaning, such as severe subject-verb agreement issues ('peoples are went', 'the percentage off fresh coffee is almost same'), incorrect prepositions, and faulty verb tenses ('in last four years'). Additionally, punctuation is poorly handled throughout the text. To progress to higher bands, the writer must work on basic sentence construction, ensure correct verb forms and tense consistency, eliminate persistent agreement errors, and incorporate a controlled mix of complex structures with higher accuracy.

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