Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The bar charts compares the results of survey about tea or coffee's intake by the Australians across Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane, Adelaide and Hobart.

Overall, it can be seen that the proportion of people went to a cafe for a coffee or tea in last 4 weeks is remained the leader throughout different cities. Whereas buying fresh coffee in last 4 weeks remained at lowest.

Going in cafes is accounted markedly for the largest shares in all cities where Melbourne and Hobart are ranging between 60% to 65%. Sydney edged down from top cities but still had the highest proportion of the people getting a coffee or tea from cafe. Whereas, Brisbane and Adelaide have approximately 55% to 50% of proportion respectively, who prefered to go to the cafe.

Moreover, buying fresh coffee lagged well behind in all cities with the lowest in Brishane and Adelaide at approximately 35%. Futhermore buying instant coffee is very popular in Hobart (54%) that figure kept declining from Brisbane to Adelaide to Melbourne to Sydeny(46%), remained the second most priority of the Australians.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main pattern accurately: café visits are the highest category in each city, while fresh-coffee purchases are generally the lowest. The comparisons for Melbourne and Hobart (around 60–65%) and for Brisbane and Adelaide (about 55% and 50%) support this overview. You also include relevant figures for fresh and instant coffee. However, the overview’s claim that fresh coffee “remained at lowest” is too broad: in Sydney, instant coffee is slightly higher, but in Melbourne fresh coffee is lower; the ranking also varies by city. The final trend description is unclear and does not accurately describe a steady decline from Brisbane through Adelaide and Melbourne to Sydney, since the values rise from Brisbane to Adelaide before falling. More precise comparisons would strengthen the report.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, an overview, and two paragraphs grouping café visits and coffee purchases. This makes the main categories easy to follow, and linking expressions such as “Overall” and “Moreover” help signal progression. However, some connections are mechanical or unclear. The repeated “Whereas” fragments do not form complete contrasts, and “that figure kept declining from Brisbane to Adelaide to Melbourne to Sydney” is difficult to interpret because the sequence is not a consistent decline. The final sentence also combines several comparisons without clearly separating them. Use complete contrast sentences and organise the city comparisons in a consistent order to make the progression more controlled.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a reasonable range of task-related vocabulary, including “proportion,” “largest shares,” “lagged behind,” and “approximately,” and the reader can generally understand the comparisons. However, several word choices and collocations are unnatural or imprecise, such as “tea or coffee’s intake,” “going in cafes,” “is accounted markedly,” and “second most priority.” These choices sometimes make the intended meaning less clear. There are also spelling errors in “Brishane,” “Futhermore,” “prefered,” and “Sydeny.” Aim for standard chart-reporting phrases such as “the proportion who visited cafés” and “accounted for the largest share,” and check spelling carefully. More precise vocabulary would make the comparisons sound more natural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including comparisons across several cities, but errors in verb forms, agreement, and sentence construction are frequent enough to affect clarity. For example, “The bar charts compares” has a subject–verb agreement error, while “the proportion of people went … is remained” combines incompatible verb forms. “Whereas buying fresh coffee … remained at lowest” is also an incomplete contrast clause, and “Melbourne and Hobart are ranging” uses an unsuitable tense for describing chart data. These patterns show that complex ideas are being attempted, but control is not yet consistent. Use the present simple for chart descriptions and check that each sentence has a complete main clause and correctly formed verbs.

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