Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The given bar chart displays the results of a survey about the individuals among buying an drinking habits of coffee and tea in the five Australian cities.

To commence with Sydeney it has recorded the that 62 percent of people went to cafe for having coffee and tea, 46 percent of them bought a instant coffee and 2 percent less have bought fresh coffee that is 44 perecntage which was the highest among the 5 cities for purchasing a fresh coffee.

Moreover, Melbourne and Hobart were recorder the same percent of people went to cafe that is 64% also this is the highest number among the 5 cities.Since, Melbourne recorded 43% of people bought fresh coffee and in Hobart it was reduced by 5% less which is 39%.But, Hobart recorded 54% of people bought instant coffee additionally in Melbourne it was 53 percent.

Lastly, Brisbane and Adelaide in these both the same number of people bought fresh coffee which is 39%.But, in Brisbane highest number of people went to cafe for having coffee and tea which is 56% and 7% less was seen in adelaide.Hence, 53% of them bought instant coffee in brisbane and it was 3% less in adelaide which is 50%.

Overall, it is clear from all the perspective that melbourne has recorded many people visting cafes.But, in Hobart many of them bought instant coffee and in Sudney many of them bought fresh coffee.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You cover all three survey categories and make relevant city comparisons, including Sydney’s high fresh-coffee figure and Hobart’s high instant-coffee figure. However, several comparisons are inaccurate: Melbourne and Hobart did not have the same café attendance (about 64% and 63%), and Brisbane and Adelaide did not share the same fresh-coffee figure (about 35%, not 39%). The overview also says Melbourne had the most café visits, although Hobart was marginally higher, and it omits the broad pattern that café visits were the most popular activity in most cities. These errors and the limited synthesis mean the main features are only partly and unevenly reported. Check each comparison against the chart and make the overview reflect the overall patterns accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, city-based paragraphs, and a concluding overview. Grouping Sydney separately and then comparing Melbourne with Hobart gives the reader a basic route through the data. However, progression is sometimes weakened by awkward or mechanical links such as “To commence with,” “Moreover,” “Lastly,” and “Hence.” Some sentences combine several figures and comparisons without clear punctuation, making relationships harder to follow—for example, the sentence beginning “Since, Melbourne recorded…” The final overview also repeats selected details rather than drawing the comparisons together. Use clearer topic sentences and organise the body by meaningful patterns, while ensuring each comparison is expressed in a complete, clearly punctuated sentence.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant task vocabulary, including “bar chart,” “recorded,” “bought,” and “percent,” so the subject is generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are unnatural, such as “individuals among buying an drinking habits,” “went to cafe for having,” and “many people visiting cafes.” Spelling errors—including “Sydeney,” “perecntage,” and “Sudney”—also reduce accuracy and can distract the reader. Some repeated wording, especially “recorded” and “people,” makes the report less precise. Build a small set of accurate chart-reporting expressions and check spelling carefully; prefer concise phrases such as “the proportion who visited a café” and “purchased fresh coffee.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, and the reader can usually identify the figures being compared. However, complex constructions are often faulty, as in “Since, Melbourne recorded…” and “But, Hobart recorded…,” where the linking words and punctuation do not fit the sentence structure. There are also recurring problems with articles, agreement, and sentence boundaries: “a instant coffee,” “Melbourne and Hobart were recorder,” and the run-on comparison ending “which is 44 perecntage.” These errors sometimes make relationships between figures difficult to follow. Practise forming complete clauses with accurate articles and verb forms, and use full stops or semicolons to separate comparisons rather than joining them with commas.

See this exact question answered at other band scores. The same prompt compared across bands.

Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.