Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

This bar chart illustrates a survey of consumers of coffee and tea as well as drinking habits of different people of five cities in Australia of last four weeks.

Overall, most of the peoples went to a cade for coffee or tea except Adelaide. The second most consumers bought instant coffee. In contrast, the lowest percentages of people bought fresh coffee in last four weeks.

In Sydney, the customers of cafe for coffee and tea were almost 62% in last four weeks but In sydney, that was the highest, at 64%. On the other hand, Brisbane was accounted for almost 55% and Adelaide had bellow 50%. Hobart was accounted for 63%. Moreover, the consumers of instant coffee in Sydney were almost 46% and Melbourne had almost 48%. Furthermore, Bisbane had 53%, Adelaide had 50% and Hobart was accounted for almost 55%.

The consumers of fresh coffee in Sydney were almost 43%. In Melbourne, The consumers of fresh coffee were 42%. In Brisbane, the consumers of fresh coffee were the lowest at bellow 35%. In Adelaide, the percentage was almost 35%. On the other hand, Hobart was accounted for 38% of fresh coffee consumers in last 4 weeks

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the chart’s subject and give a broad overview: café visits are generally the most common activity, while fresh-coffee purchases are usually the least common. You also report figures for all five cities and all three categories, so the response is relevant and covers much of the data. However, the overview is not fully accurate: café visits are not the leading activity in Adelaide, where instant coffee is slightly higher. The Sydney comparison is also contradictory: “almost 62%” is followed by “the highest, at 64%,” although Melbourne is marginally highest and Sydney is about 61%. Some comparisons remain a list of figures rather than highlighting the main contrasts. Make the overview precise and compare the highest and lowest results clearly.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs for café visits and coffee purchases. This helps the reader locate the information. However, progression within the café paragraph is confusing: “In Sydney” is repeated, and the statement that Sydney was highest conflicts with the earlier figure and the chart. Linking phrases such as “On the other hand” and “Moreover” are used, but they sometimes connect details without showing a clear contrast or addition. The final paragraph also ends abruptly, without a concluding comparison. Grouping the figures consistently by activity and using clearer references to each city would make the organisation easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “percentage,” “consumers,” “survey,” and “bought instant coffee,” and the reader can generally understand the categories being described. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or repetitive. “Peoples” is not appropriate for residents, “cade” appears to be a misspelling of “café,” and “was accounted for” is repeatedly used where a simpler reporting verb is needed. City names are also misspelled (“Bisbane”), and “bellow” should be “below.” Aim for precise, natural expressions for describing data, and vary reporting verbs without using phrases that do not fit the meaning.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a few different sentence patterns, including an overview sentence and comparisons introduced by “whereas” or “on the other hand.” However, sentence structures are mostly simple, and errors occur frequently enough to make some statements awkward or unclear. For example, “This bar chart illustrates a survey … of last four weeks” has an incomplete grammatical relationship, while “Brisbane was accounted for almost 55%” uses an incorrect passive construction. Capitalisation is inconsistent in “In sydney” and “The consumers,” and articles and prepositions are often missing or misplaced. Practise accurate patterns such as “the proportion of residents who…” and “X stood at…,” then check each sentence for agreement, articles, and punctuation.

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