Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

This chart shows the result of a survey about people cofee and tea buying and their drinking habits in five Australian cities in Sydney,Melbourne,Brisbane, Adelaide and Hobart.

first of all charts shows the differnet types of cofee bought by peoples in the city of sydney and Melbourne. Both cities follwed the same trend.peoples bought fresh cofee 44 percent and instant cofee 45 percent in last 4 weeks. While 60percent peoples went to a cafe for cofee and drinking tea in last 4 weeks.

In the third paragraph we saw that brisbane city 35% percent people bought fresh cofee and 52 percent bought instant cofee and 55 percent accpunts went to cafe for cofee or tea in last 4 weeks.in the same way in Adelaide city 34%percent people bought fresh cofee and 49 percent instant cofee and 50 percent people went to cafe for cofee or tea in last 4 weeks.

In the same way Hobert city is also follow the same trend .in last 4 weeks 37% people bought fresh copy and 54%people boughht instant coffee and 62%percent people went to cafe for cofee or tea in last 4 weeks.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the three activities and cover all five cities, with several figures broadly matching the chart—for example, fresh-coffee purchases in Brisbane and Adelaide are reported at about 35% and 34%. However, the response mainly lists city-by-city details and does not give a clear overview of the main patterns. A key comparison is that café visits were the most common activity in four cities, while instant coffee led in Adelaide; this is not stated. Some figures are also imprecise: Melbourne’s café figure is about 64%, not 60%, and Hobart’s fresh-coffee figure is about 39%, rather than 37%. To strengthen the report, summarise the overall highs and lows, then select accurate comparisons rather than repeating each city’s figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: the opening names the topic, and the following paragraphs group Sydney and Melbourne, Brisbane and Adelaide, and then Hobart. This gives the reader some sense of the city sequence. However, progression is mostly a series of repeated lists, and phrases such as “first of all,” “in the third paragraph,” and “in the same way” do not clearly show meaningful relationships between the data. The final paragraph does not provide a concluding overview. Use a clear overview paragraph followed by comparisons grouped by activity or by notable similarities and differences. Check sentence boundaries and punctuation, as several ideas run together, making the organisation harder to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough task-related vocabulary to communicate the basic subject, including “fresh coffee,” “instant coffee,” “bought,” and “went to a cafe.” The repeated use of “people,” “in the last 4 weeks,” and “in the same way,” however, makes the description limited and repetitive. There are also noticeable spelling and word-choice errors, including “cofee,” “differnet,” “accpunts,” and “copy”; these can distract the reader or make a detail unclear. Aim for accurate, varied language for reporting data, such as “the proportion of residents,” “recorded,” and “was highest.” Use standard spellings consistently, and avoid phrases such as “the same trend” unless you explain precisely what the trend is.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response communicates its basic meaning through mostly simple statements, and there is an attempt to connect ideas with “while.” However, sentence structures are limited, and frequent errors in sentence formation, agreement, articles, and punctuation make the writing difficult to read smoothly. For example, “chart shows” needs an article, while “Hobert city is also follow” combines incompatible verb forms. The opening sentence also lacks a clear grammatical structure, and several sentences begin with lowercase letters or run together after full stops. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then add controlled comparisons such as “In Sydney, café visits were more common than either type of coffee purchase.” Check verb forms and sentence boundaries during proofreading.

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