Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The given bar chart illustrates the result of a survey about people's coffee and tea bying and drinkings habits in 5 different Australian cities.

Overall, the highest value in all cities are those people who went to a cafe for coffe or tea in last 4 weeks. In contrast, the moderate value are those residents who bought instant coffee in last 28 days. Moreover, the lowest valu are those citizens who bought fresh coffe in last month.

At first, the ratio in Sydney is about 43% who bought fresh coffee in last 4 weeks. The Melbourne and Hobart shared same proportion, about 63%. In contrast, Brisbane has 2nd lowest percentage of coffee residants and the lowest value of brought fresh coffee in last month is in Adelaide.

In addition, the people who bought instant coffee in last 28 days were about 45% in Sudney, the percantage rose to about 48% in Melbourne, a dramatically rise in the ratio in Brisbane city where propotion is 53%, then fall in ratio of city residents and moved to 50% in Adelaide.

However, 54% is in Hobart citizens who boght instant coffee.

The percentage in sydney is 61%, 63% in Melbourne, sudden decreased to 51% in Brisbane, 49% in Adelaide and moved to 63% in Hobart, these are those residents who went to a cafe for coffee or a tea in last month.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the three survey categories and provide an overview that recognises café visits as the most popular activity overall and fresh coffee purchases as generally the least popular. You also report several relevant figures, including instant coffee in Brisbane and Hobart. However, some comparisons are inaccurate or unclear: Melbourne and Hobart did not share the same proportion for fresh coffee; the approximately 63% figure refers to café visits. The café figure for Brisbane is also reported as 51%, rather than about 56%. The overview’s claim that instant coffee is “moderate” is vague, and the response does not clearly compare the cities across all three categories. Check each figure against its series and make the main contrasts more precise.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and paragraphs describing the survey results. This gives the reader some organisation, and linking expressions such as “In contrast,” “Moreover,” and “However” show attempts to connect ideas. However, progression is uneven because the figures are presented in a largely city-by-city sequence without a clear grouping or consistent comparison. Some links are inaccurate or confusing—for example, “The Melbourne and Hobart shared same proportion” interrupts the fresh-coffee comparison with a café figure. Repeated transitions do not always clarify relationships. Group the data by activity or by meaningful similarities, and use references such as “this figure” only when their meaning is unmistakable.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant task vocabulary, including “proportion,” “percentage,” “residents,” and “survey,” and you attempt to vary expressions for the three activities. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, such as “moderate value,” “ratio of coffee residents,” and “a dramatically rise.” Repetition of “value,” “ratio,” and “percentage” also makes the description less precise. Spelling errors—including “bying,” “coffe,” “Sudney,” and “percantage”—are noticeable and sometimes distract from the data. Use standard chart language consistently, such as “the proportion of residents who…” or “the figure for…,” and proofread spelling and word forms carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including clauses linked with “where” and “who,” but control is inconsistent. Errors in agreement and sentence structure appear in examples such as “the highest value in all cities are those people” and “the moderate value are those residents.” Articles and prepositions are also often missing or awkward, as in “in last 4 weeks” and “in last month.” Some sentences combine several comparisons without clear grammatical relationships, particularly the sentence beginning “The percentage in sydney is 61%.” These problems can make the intended comparison difficult to follow. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement and complete comparison patterns, then check articles and prepositions when describing time periods.

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