Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-09
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The provided bar chart depicts the information regarding the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australians cities.
Overall, it is crystal clear that maximum people went to a cafe for coffee or tea whereas,minimum people bought fresh coffee.
To commence with, In sydney 44% of people bought fresh coffee in last 4 weeks whereas, 61% people went to a cafe. Besides this, in Melbourne, 49% people bhought instant coffee where, percentage of people went to a cafe were recorded at 64%. Moving further, the percentage of fresh coffee buyer in Birsbane was 34% where the people went to a cafe was almost double(52%).
Moving further, in Adelaide, 34% of people bought fresh coffee where, the percentage of people bought instant coffee or went to a cafe for coffee was similar (50%). Moving ahead, In Hobart, 54% people bought fresh coffee where the percentage of people went to a cafe was recorded at 63%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
You identify the chart’s subject and give an overview, noting that café visits are generally the most popular activity and fresh coffee purchases are comparatively low. However, the overview is too broad: fresh coffee is not the least common activity in every city, and café visits are not highest in Adelaide. Several figures are also misreported or attached to the wrong category: Hobart’s 54% refers to instant coffee, not fresh coffee; Brisbane café visits are about 56%, rather than 52%; and Adelaide’s café figure is about 50%, not similar to instant coffee at exactly 50% in a way that supports the overall claim. Covering all three activities consistently across the cities and selecting accurate comparisons would make the summary more complete and reliable.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and a sequence of city-based details. This makes the general subject easy to follow. However, the progression is somewhat mechanical, relying repeatedly on “Moving further,” “Moving ahead,” and “whereas.” The city-by-city approach also leads to uneven coverage: some cities have fresh coffee and café figures, while instant coffee is omitted in several cases. In addition, the long detail paragraph would be clearer if information were grouped by activity or presented in a consistent pattern for each city. Use a wider range of linking expressions and clearer comparisons to improve the flow.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
You use relevant vocabulary such as “bar chart,” “survey,” “percentage,” and “bought instant coffee,” so the topic is generally clear. There is some repetition, particularly of “percentage of people” and “went to a cafe,” and several word-choice or spelling problems reduce precision: “Australians cities,” “bhought,” and “Birsbane.” Phrases such as “maximum people” and “minimum people” are also unnatural for describing chart proportions. Aim for accurate collocations and vary the language used to report figures, for example, “the proportion of residents” or “the share who visited a café.” Proofreading spelling would further strengthen clarity.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
You attempt to connect ideas in longer sentences using “whereas” and “where,” but these complex constructions are often faulty or awkward. For example, “where the people went to a cafe was almost double” does not form a clear comparison, and “the percentage of people bought instant coffee” is missing a grammatical link such as “who.” There are also recurring issues with articles, sentence openings, and punctuation, as in “In sydney” and “whereas,minimum.” Most sentences remain understandable, but the limited control of these patterns makes the data harder to interpret. Practise accurate comparative structures and check sentence boundaries, articles, and clause formation.
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