Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The graph chart illustrates that the result of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. However cities is gradually Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane, Adelaide, Hobart.

First of all, we can clearly see that in went to a cafe for coffee or tea in last 4 week highest in Melbourne which is up to 60% and close to 65%. Moreover, went to a cafe for coffee or tea in last 4 week lowest in Adelaide which is 49%.

Secondly, bought coffee in last 4 weeks highest in Hobart city which is 54%. and lowest in Sydney which is 45%.

Finally, bought fresh coffee in last 4 weeks, largest in Sydney city which percentage in only 44%. and compare to others to lowest in Brisbane 34%.

buying fresh coffee is compare to others two are lowest percentage. Besides, went to a cafe for coffee or tea in last 4 weeks is highest all the time.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the three survey categories and make some relevant comparisons, including that café visits were lowest in Adelaide and that fresh-coffee purchases were relatively low in Brisbane. However, several key details are inaccurate: café visits were highest in Melbourne at about 64%, but Hobart was almost as high at 63%, not simply omitted; instant coffee peaked in Hobart at about 55%, whereas you report 54% as “bought coffee” without specifying instant coffee. You also incorrectly call Sydney the lowest for this category; Brisbane is lowest at about 35%. The overview is limited and does not clearly compare the three patterns across cities. The response is 149 words, one word below the 150-word minimum; 11 words copied from the prompt were not counted.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic sequence, using “First of all,” “Secondly,” and “Finally” to move through the chart categories, so the reader can follow the broad order of your points. However, the organisation is more like a list than a developed summary: there is no clear overview paragraph, and the final comments repeat that café visits were highest and fresh coffee was lowest without adding a precise comparison. Some links are awkward or unclear, such as “However cities is gradually…” and “Besides,” before the concluding observation. Grouping the main trends in an overview, then supporting them with selected city comparisons, would create clearer progression and make the linking language more effective.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant chart vocabulary such as “highest,” “lowest,” “percentage,” and “compare,” and the reader can generally identify the categories you mean. However, the range is limited and several phrases are repetitive or imprecise. For example, “bought coffee” does not distinguish fresh from instant coffee, and “largest in Sydney city” is an unnatural way to describe a proportion. Phrases such as “in went to a cafe” and “buying fresh coffee is compare to others two” also make the intended meaning harder to follow. Use the chart’s category labels accurately and choose natural reporting expressions, such as “the proportion who visited a café” or “fresh-coffee purchases were lowest in…”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt a few longer sentences and use basic sequencing expressions, but most statements rely on simple, incomplete patterns, and grammatical errors are frequent. For instance, “The graph chart illustrates that the result…” lacks a well-formed clause, while “cities is gradually Sydney…” has problems with agreement and sentence construction. In “highest in Melbourne which is up to 60%,” the comparison is not expressed as a complete sentence, and “bought fresh coffee… largest in Sydney” similarly omits a clear verb structure. There are also inconsistent sentence starts and punctuation, including “and lowest” after a full stop. Practise complete subject–verb sentences and accurate comparative clauses before adding more complex structures.

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