Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

the bar chart show the percantage of people in five australian cities who bought fresh coffee bought instead coffee or want to a cafe or tea in the last four weeks

overall visiting a cafe was the most popular choice in most cities buying fresh coffee and less polpuar than buying in five different cities but the only adelaide was the smallest all of then

the sydney 44% the people was bought fresh coffee and melbourne 48% bought instant coffee while the brisbane 34% people bought fresh coffee therfore the hobart 54% in highest ranged bouht coffee the adelaide was only the smallest in last four weeks

the brisbane around 53% bought instant coffe while the hobart 54% was the highest bought instant coffee the sydney 455 therefore the 535 the brisbane was the buying bought coffee and the cafe and coffe in sidney ,melbourne and hobart was the grestest percantage while brisbane and adelaide was normal

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the chart’s subject and attempt an overview, noting that café visits are popular and that Adelaide is relatively low. However, the overview is unclear and partly inaccurate: café visits were highest in Melbourne, Hobart and Sydney, while Adelaide—not all cities—had the lowest café figure. Several comparisons also confuse categories or cities. For example, “Hobart 54%” refers to instant coffee, not fresh coffee, and the statement that Melbourne had 48% buying instant coffee is close to the chart, but the other figures are not consistently reported. The response therefore selects only a limited set of relevant features and does not summarise the main patterns reliably. Group the data by category and report the highest and lowest results accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response into an introduction, an overview and further details, which gives the reader some sense of the task’s structure. However, progression within the body is difficult to follow: the third paragraph shifts between fresh coffee, instant coffee and café visits without clear grouping, and the final sentence introduces several cities and categories in a confusing sequence. Linking words such as “while” and “therefore” are used, but the relationships they signal are often unclear or illogical. Paragraphing alone does not create a coherent comparison. Organise the report into clear sections—for example, café visits first, then the two coffee-purchasing categories—and use simple, accurate comparisons to connect the figures.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some task-related vocabulary, including “bar chart,” “percentage,” “bought instant coffee” and “cafe,” so the reader can recognise the general subject. However, the range is basic and repetitive, and frequent spelling and word-choice problems strain understanding. Examples include “percantage,” “polpuar,” “instead coffee,” “grestest percantage” and “normal.” Some phrases are also unsuitable for describing the data, such as “highest ranged” and “the people was bought.” Aim for accurate chart language and collocations, such as “the proportion of residents,” “recorded the highest figure” and “went to a café.” Check spelling carefully, especially for repeated key terms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You make an effort to form longer sentences and comparisons, but grammatical control is weak and errors frequently make relationships between figures difficult to understand. For example, “the bar chart show” has incorrect subject–verb agreement, while “the sydney 44% the people was bought fresh coffee” lacks a clear sentence structure and uses an incorrect verb form. Articles, plurals and punctuation are also often missing, and several clauses run together without clear boundaries. The response relies on a narrow range of sentence patterns, so comparisons are not expressed reliably. Practise writing short, complete sentences first, such as “In Sydney, 44% bought fresh coffee,” then combine related information using accurate forms such as “whereas” or “compared with.”

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