Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

the bar chart compares the percentage of residentas in five australian cities sydney, melbourne, brisbane,adelaide,hobartwho bought fresh coffee ans instant coffee and visit the cafe for coffee or tea in the last 4 week overall visiting a cafe was the popular in most cities particularly the melbourne was the least common except in sydney hobart can also show the high ratio of the people to visit the cafe for tea or coffee in sydney around 45% poeple visit the cafe for the coffee or tea and in melbourne around 61% poeple is visited the cafe for coffee and it is huge ratio as compare to sydney and in the brisbane 34% poeple can bought te fresh coffee andthe 53% poeple can visit the cafe for thecoffee ansd teA IN LAST 4 week and in adelaide 34% people bought the fresh coffee and the 53% people bought the instant cofffee and 49% people visit the cafe for coffee and tea and the last one is hobart 37% peoplebought a fresh coffee and the 49% bought the instant coffee and 64%people can visit the cfe for the coffee and tea

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

The response identifies the chart’s subject and includes figures for all five cities, so it shows some relevant coverage. However, the overview is unclear and contains a major reversal: café visits were highest in Melbourne and Hobart, not “the least common” there. Several comparisons and figures are also inaccurate: Sydney’s café figure is about 61%, not 45%, while Hobart’s instant-coffee figure is about 55%, not 49%; Brisbane’s café figure is about 56%, not 53%. The response mainly lists city-by-city details rather than selecting the clearest overall patterns, such as café visits being the most popular activity in four cities and instant coffee leading in Adelaide. A more accurate overview and carefully checked comparisons would make the summary more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is an attempt to move through the cities in sequence, and the response uses a few basic links such as “and” and “in Adelaide.” However, nearly all the information is packed into one long, run-on passage, so the reader has difficulty distinguishing the overview from the supporting details. The opening overview is also difficult to follow, and the repeated “and” does not clearly show how the figures relate or contrast. Organise the response into clear paragraphs—an introduction and overview, followed by grouped comparisons—and use linking expressions such as “whereas,” “by contrast,” and “in comparison” to make the progression easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some task-relevant vocabulary, including “percentage,” “fresh coffee,” “instant coffee,” and “visit the cafe,” which helps identify the chart categories. However, the range is limited and several expressions are repeated, while inaccurate or awkward choices sometimes make the meaning harder to understand. For example, “huge ratio” is not a natural way to describe a proportion, and “people can bought” does not express the intended survey result clearly. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “residentas,” “poeple,” and “cofffee.” Use precise terms such as “proportion of residents” and “went to a café,” and check spelling and collocations carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to combine several details in longer sentences, but sentence structures are mostly uncontrolled, and frequent errors make relationships between ideas difficult to follow. For example, “people can bought” has an incorrect verb form, while “people is visited” has faulty agreement and passive construction. The opening also runs several clauses together without clear sentence boundaries, and phrases such as “in the last 4 week” show problems with number and article use. These errors occur across much of the response rather than in isolated slips. Build accuracy first with short, complete sentences using past-tense reporting forms, such as “In Sydney, 61% went to a café,” then add comparisons using correctly formed clauses.

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