Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar chart illustrates about a coffee and buying and drinking habits in five cities in Australia with percentages of different in all cities.

In Sydney bought fresh coffee in last 4 weeks percentage was very high than other cities but in Brisbane fresh coffee was very low by percentage of city residents. Whenever, percentage of instant coffee in last 4 weeks was very high in Hobart but in Sydney instant coffee was very low by percentage of city residents.

In Melboume and Hobart went to a cafe for coffee or tea in last 4 weeks was very high percentage but in Adelaide cafe for coffee or tea was very low by percentage of city residents.In all cities percentage of residents is different but in two cities percentage is same in one

In coclusion, all cities are different percentage of redidents but two countries percentage of residents was same.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify several relevant extremes: fresh coffee is highest in Sydney and lowest in Brisbane, instant coffee is highest in Hobart and lowest in Sydney, and café visits are high in Melbourne and Hobart but lowest in Adelaide. However, the report is only a minimal response to the chart: it gives no figures, offers little comparison between categories, and does not clearly summarise the overall pattern. The claim that two cities have the same percentage is unclear and unsupported; Brisbane and Adelaide are close for fresh coffee, but the conclusion does not specify this. The response is also one word below the required minimum. To develop the report, include approximate values and a clear overview of the main contrasts.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some basic organisation: the response moves from fresh and instant coffee to café visits, then gives a concluding sentence. This helps the reader recognise the broad topics being discussed. However, progression within the paragraphs is weak, and the repeated pattern of “very high” and “very low” makes the comparisons feel like a list rather than a connected summary. “Whenever” does not express the intended contrast, while the unfinished idea “in one” leaves the reader unsure what is being compared. The conclusion repeats the opening idea instead of drawing together the key findings. Use clear paragraphing and linking expressions such as “by contrast” and “overall,” and make each comparison complete.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses a small set of relevant terms, including “fresh coffee,” “instant coffee,” “cafe,” and “percentage,” so the chart’s subject is generally recognisable. However, vocabulary is basic and repetitive, especially the repeated phrases “very high” and “very low.” Several expressions are awkward or unclear, such as “a coffee and buying and drinking habits,” “different in all cities,” and “two countries,” which refers incorrectly to cities. Spelling errors such as “Melboume,” “coclusion,” and “redidents” also reduce clarity. Build a more precise range for describing data, using terms such as “proportion,” “highest,” “lowest,” and “roughly equal,” and check spelling before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to form comparisons and longer sentences, but grammatical control is limited and errors frequently make the relationships between ideas difficult to follow. For example, “In Sydney bought fresh coffee in last 4 weeks percentage was very high than other cities” lacks a clear subject and has an incorrect comparative structure. The sentence beginning “In Melboume and Hobart went to a cafe…” has the same missing-subject problem, and “percentage of residents is different” does not agree naturally with the plural subject “cities.” Sentence boundaries and spacing are also inconsistent. Practise a reliable pattern such as “The percentage of residents who bought fresh coffee was highest in Sydney,” then vary it with accurate comparative clauses.

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