Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-13
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The given bar charts illustrates the outcome of a survey in which peoples drinking habits of coffee and tea of five Australian cities and also provides their proportion.
overall, when we analyzed the graph closely we understand Melbourne and Hobart hold the most portion for people who preferred cafe for coffee and tea in last 4 weeks. other three holds less than these two. Hobart and Brisbane holds most percentage of people who bought instant coffee. peoples those who bought coffee or tea mostly found in Sydney and Melbourne.
Hobart and Melbourne jointly holds approximately 65 percent for ones who went cafe and drunk coffee and tea. Moreover instant coffee trend was also good in both cities 55% and almost 50 percent , But people who bought fresh coffee was 33 percent and 45%.
Sydney people have 61% ratio who went cafe and buy coffee and tea. on the other hand, Brisbane carries 56 percent for same sector. additionally Brisbane also hold 54 percent for ones who bought instant coffee which is also highest in all cities. Adelaide had similar patterns of ratio for instant coffee like 50 percent. and for those went to cafe for coffee and tea was approximately 49 percent, Furthermore for fresh coffee the consumption rate was only 34 percent.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
You identify relevant features, including café visits being high in Melbourne and Hobart and instant coffee purchases being relatively high in Hobart and Brisbane. Several figures are also broadly accurate, such as Adelaide’s approximately 50% for instant coffee and 49% for café visits. However, the overview is unclear and includes a misleading claim: Sydney and Melbourne did not have the highest café figures; Melbourne and Hobart were highest, while Sydney was lower. The response also omits some important comparisons, especially fresh coffee, and gives Brisbane’s instant-coffee figure as 54%, slightly above the chart’s approximate 53%. To strengthen the report, state the main overall patterns accurately, then compare all three categories across the cities with selected supporting figures.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response has an opening, an overview-like paragraph and further details, so there is some organisation. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the overview mixes categories and makes a claim that is later contradicted by the figures: it says Sydney and Melbourne have the most café visits, then reports higher values for Melbourne and Hobart. Comparisons are also scattered, and the final paragraph focuses on Sydney, Brisbane and Adelaide without a consistent category-by-category structure. Linking words such as “Moreover,” “on the other hand” and “Furthermore” show an attempt to connect ideas, but some are used mechanically or do not clarify the relationship. Group the report by category or by clear city comparisons, and use a concise overview before the details.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “proportion,” “percentage,” “trend” and “consumption rate,” and the reader can generally identify the categories being discussed. However, the range is limited and several expressions are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “hold the most portion,” “same sector” and “ratio for instant coffee.” Repeated use of “holds” and “people” also makes the description less precise. Choose standard chart language and collocations, for example, “accounted for the highest share,” “the proportion who visited cafés,” and “purchased instant coffee.” Take care that the selected word expresses the intended comparison rather than relying on vague terms such as “good” or “most percentage.”
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response attempts some longer sentences and uses past-tense forms to describe the survey, but grammatical control is inconsistent and errors sometimes make relationships unclear. Examples include “The given bar charts illustrates,” where the subject and verb do not agree, and “Hobart and Melbourne jointly holds,” which also needs plural agreement. Articles and sentence boundaries are often missing or inconsistent, as in “went cafe” and the run-on sequence beginning “Adelaide had similar patterns.” Capitalisation after full stops is also unreliable. Use shorter, complete sentences while checking subject–verb agreement, articles and punctuation; then add controlled complex structures, such as clauses comparing one city with another.
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