Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The bar graph describes the coffee and tea drinking habits of people in the last four weeks in urban area of specific region, Australia.

Overall, majority of the society going to enjoy beverages in cafes.Most of the people bought fresh and minority of them purchased instant coffee to drink it at home.

In Melbourne, Sydney, and Hobart, more than 60% people enjoy beverages at cafes, 55% residents in Brisbane and almost 50% citizens enjoy it in Adelaide. In Brisbane and Hobart, more than 50% people bought instant coffee, 50% in Adelaide, higher than 45% in Melbourne and almost 45% in Sydney, in the previous four weeks.

Fresh coffee bought by roughly 45% in Sydney and Melbourne. In Hobart, more than 35% are those who bought fresh coffee to take it at home, while in Brisbane and Adelaide, fresh coffee sold at lower rate approximately 35% which was same in both cities.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover all three activities and give a relevant overview by identifying café visits as the most popular option overall. The comparisons are generally grounded in the chart: café attendance is above 60% in Melbourne, Sydney and Hobart, while fresh-coffee purchases are around 35% in Brisbane and Adelaide. However, the overview is partly unclear and inaccurate: “Most of the people bought fresh” conflicts with the data, since instant coffee exceeds fresh coffee in every city. The claim that fresh coffee was bought by a “minority” is also too broad to serve as a clear comparison. To strengthen the response, state the main pattern accurately—for example, café visits lead in most cities, while instant coffee purchases are higher than fresh-coffee purchases throughout—and develop the key city differences more precisely.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview and two paragraphs comparing café visits, instant coffee and fresh coffee. This makes the information reasonably easy to follow, and the city-by-city grouping is relevant. However, progression is sometimes weakened by abrupt shifts between categories and by unclear links between ideas. For example, “Most of the people bought fresh and minority of them purchased instant coffee” does not clearly connect to the later, more accurate figures showing instant coffee ahead in every city. Some phrasing, such as “In Brisbane and Hobart… 50% in Adelaide, higher than 45% in Melbourne,” also makes the comparison feel compressed. Use clearer topic sentences and linking phrases to distinguish the three activities and signal contrasts consistently.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a reasonable range of task-related vocabulary, including “bar graph,” “residents,” “purchased,” “approximately” and “rate,” so the main subject is clear. There are also attempts to vary references to people and locations. However, several word choices and collocations are unnatural or imprecise, such as “urban area of specific region,” “majority of the society,” and “enjoy beverages in cafes.” “Fresh coffee sold at lower rate” also suggests sales data rather than the proportion of residents who bought it. These choices reduce precision, even though the reader can usually infer your meaning. Prefer direct chart language such as “residents,” “visited a café,” and “the proportion who bought fresh coffee,” and avoid unnecessary paraphrases that sound unnatural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple statements and more developed comparisons, including the sentence beginning “In Brisbane and Hobart” and the contrast between cities in the final paragraph. Meaning is generally recoverable, but some grammatical errors remain. Examples include missing articles and plural marking in “in urban area” and “more than 60% people,” as well as the incomplete construction “Fresh coffee bought by roughly 45%.” The overview also has faulty verb forms in “majority of the society going” and “Most of the people bought fresh and minority of them purchased.” Add the necessary subjects and verbs, and check agreement and articles: for example, “The majority of residents went to cafés” and “Fresh coffee was bought by roughly 45% of residents.” More consistently accurate sentence patterns would improve control.

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