Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The bar chart illustrates the result of the survey conducted by five Australian cities about the resident's buying and drinking habits of tea and coffee in the last four weeks.

Overall, it can be seen that majority of people prefer drinking coffee in a cafe across five cities( Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane, Adelaide and Hobart) expect Adelaide which favor instant coffee over fresh or visiting to cafe.

In Brisbane and Adelaide, the percentage of buying fresh coffee is almost similar which is 33% whereas the percentage of purchasing instant coffee is both the cities is 54% and 50% respectively. Moreover, the percentage of people living in Brisbane who are visiting cafe for consuming coffee is more (55%) as compared to Adelaide (49%).

Melbourne is the vast consumer of consuming coffee from a cafe in the last four weeks with the proportion of approximately 63% as compared to Sydney (61%) and Hobart (62%) whereas purchasing fresh coffee remains the least preferable across all the three cities with 44 percent of Sydney, 43 percent of Melbourne and Hobart with almost 38%. Talking about buying instant coffee the proportion increases gradually in a month while Sydney at 44%, Melbourne at 43% and Hobart with the highest percentage of 54%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You provide a relevant overview, identifying café visits as the leading activity in most cities and Adelaide as the exception, where instant coffee is marginally higher. You also include several useful comparisons, such as café attendance in Melbourne, Sydney and Hobart, and the similar fresh-coffee figures for Brisbane and Adelaide. However, some details are inaccurate: fresh coffee in Brisbane and Adelaide is about 34.5% in each, not 33%; Sydney’s instant-coffee figure is about 45.5%, not 44%; and fresh coffee is not the least popular activity in all three cities named, since café visits are higher but fresh coffee is lower than instant coffee in Sydney and Melbourne. The overview is also somewhat broad. More precise, consistently checked comparisons would make the key features clearer and better developed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and two paragraphs comparing groups of cities. This gives the reader a basic route through the information, and linking expressions such as “Overall,” “Moreover,” and “whereas” help connect comparisons. However, the progression is not always clear. The final paragraph moves from café attendance to fresh coffee and then instant coffee, while the phrase “the proportion increases gradually in a month” does not clearly explain what is being compared. The grouping of Brisbane and Adelaide followed by Melbourne, Sydney and Hobart is workable, but the comparisons within each paragraph could be ordered more consistently by activity or by city. Clearer referencing and more purposeful transitions would improve the flow.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of vocabulary for describing survey data, including “percentage,” “proportion,” “purchasing,” and “preferable.” These choices show an attempt to vary the language rather than repeat the chart labels throughout. Some word combinations, however, are unnatural or imprecise: “vast consumer of consuming coffee from a cafe” is awkward, and “the proportion increases gradually in a month” does not accurately express the comparison. “Expect Adelaide” is also the wrong word for introducing an exception. Aim for concise, conventional chart language such as “had the highest proportion,” “visited a café,” and “except for Adelaide.” More accurate collocations would make your comparisons easier to understand and strengthen your control of vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentences, including comparisons with “whereas” and “as compared to,” and the main meaning is generally understandable. Some grammatical errors remain, particularly with articles, agreement, and sentence construction. For example, “the resident's buying” needs a plural form, “majority of people” requires an article, and “the percentage of purchasing instant coffee is both the cities” is not a complete, well-formed construction. The long sentence beginning “Melbourne is the vast consumer” also combines several comparisons without clear grammatical control. Check singular and plural forms, use articles consistently, and divide sentences when they contain several separate comparisons. These changes would preserve your range while making the writing more accurate.

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