Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-14
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
According the chart showing coffee and tea buying and drinking in five cities in Australia most below buying free coffe in Brisbane. Brisbane Fresh coffee percentafe is almost 39% and Brisbane most bought instant coffee pecentage is mid of 50% to 55%.Brisbane went to a cafe for coffee or tea in last 4 weeks is 56% in last 4 weeks. Now talks about Sydney people bought fresh coffee in last 4 week is almot 48 to 49 percent. Sydney bought instant coffee in last weeks percentage is almot 46%. Went to cafe for coffee or tea in last 4 weeks in Sydney is upto 60 percent. In the list of chart Melborne city coffee perantage is second highest candles. Fresh coffee in last 4 weeks is about 44%. Melbourn Bought instant
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5
The response identifies several relevant categories and gives some approximate figures, such as Brisbane’s café attendance at 56% and Sydney’s instant-coffee figure at about 46%. However, key values are misreported: Brisbane’s fresh-coffee figure is about 34.5%, not almost 39%, while Sydney’s fresh-coffee figure is about 44%, not 48–49%. The response also ends mid-sentence at “Melbourn Bought instant,” so it does not provide a complete summary or a clear overview of the main patterns across all five cities. The required minimum of 150 words is not met; the response is 131 words. To improve, give a concise overview of the main comparisons, check figures against the chart, and complete the account of the cities and categories.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The response follows a basic city-by-city sequence, moving from Brisbane to Sydney and then Melbourne, and phrases such as “Now talks about” signal an attempt to guide the reader. However, the progression is difficult to follow because there is no clear overview or paragraph structure, and the repeated “in last 4 weeks” wording makes the account feel like a list rather than a connected summary. The final phrase, “Melbourn Bought instant,” leaves the discussion unfinished and interrupts the flow. Organise the response into an introduction, an overview of the main trends, and a short comparison of selected details. Use linking expressions to show contrasts, rather than relying on repeated transitions.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The response uses some task-relevant vocabulary, including “fresh coffee,” “instant coffee,” “percentage,” and “cafe,” so the reader can generally identify the categories being discussed. However, the range is limited and several spelling or word-choice errors make parts harder to understand, including “free coffe,” “pecentage,” “perantage,” and “candles.” Phrases such as “most below buying” and “second highest candles” do not communicate a clear comparison. Aim for accurate chart language and natural collocations, for example “the proportion of residents” and “the highest figure.” Proofreading spelling and choosing precise terms for trends and comparisons would make the information clearer.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The response attempts to report figures using simple sentence patterns, but grammatical control is inconsistent and the range of structures is narrow. For example, “According the chart showing…” lacks a complete, well-formed opening, while “Brisbane Fresh coffee percentafe is almost 39%” does not clearly establish the relationship between the city and the figure. The repeated construction “Went to a cafe … is upto 60 percent” also lacks a clear subject and uses an awkward sentence pattern. Punctuation and spacing are inconsistent, particularly where sentences run together. Practise complete subject–verb sentences, accurate articles and prepositions, and varied comparison structures such as “The figure for X was higher than that for Y.”
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