Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The chart illustrates the survey results about the coffee and tea that people buying in Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane, Adelaide, and Hobart in last 4 weeks.

Overall, the proportion of city residents who went to a cafe for coffee or tea in last 4 weeks is considerably high in all our cities the the fresh and instant coffee individually. While, the percentages of people who bought fresh coffee was at lowest in all four cities than the other two.

In Melbourne, Sydney, and Hobart, the proportion of city residents who bough both coffee or tea was significantly high at 64%, 61%, and 62% respectively. While, in Brisbane and Adelaide the proportion of consumers was at 55% and 50% approximately.

Sydney and Melbourne had approximately same percentage of costumers in last 4 weeks laid at 44% and 43% respectively while the Brisbane had lowest percentage at 33% and other two laid at 38% and 34%. If we come to the consumers who bought instant coffee the Hobart has the highest proportion of city residents at 54% and Sydney had lowest at 45% approximately while Melbourne, Brisbane, and Adelaide laid at 47%, 53%, and 50% respectively.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the three survey activities and give an overview that café visits were generally more common, while fresh-coffee purchases were lower. Several comparisons are also relevant, including the high café figures for Melbourne, Sydney and Hobart and the relatively high instant-coffee figures in Hobart and Brisbane. However, the overview is not fully accurate: fresh coffee was not the lowest activity in every city, since in Sydney its figure was slightly below instant coffee but in other cities the comparison varies, and the claim that it was lower than both categories across all four cities is too broad. Some figures are also misreported, such as Melbourne’s café figure (about 63.5%, not 64% is acceptable as an approximation) and its instant-coffee figure (about 48.5%, rather than 47%). More precise, consistently accurate comparisons would strengthen coverage.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and paragraphs comparing café visits and coffee purchases. This gives the reader a basic route through the information. However, progression within the paragraphs is uneven, and several comparisons are crowded into long sentences. The repeated use of “While” to begin clauses does not always connect the ideas smoothly, and “If we come to” is an informal, mechanical transition. Some references are also unclear, particularly “other two,” which makes the cities being compared harder to identify. Group the figures by activity or by clear high/low patterns, use explicit city names when needed, and vary linking expressions so the comparisons build logically.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “proportion,” “percentage,” “consumers,” and “bought instant coffee,” so the topic is generally clear. There is also some attempt to vary wording rather than repeat “people.” However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or awkward, such as “people buying,” “the coffee and tea,” “costumers,” and “percentages … was at lowest.” “Laid at” is repeatedly used where a more natural reporting verb is needed, and “significantly high” is not a precise description of the figures. These errors make the language less natural and occasionally slow understanding. Focus on accurate collocations for describing data, such as “stood at,” “accounted for,” and “was higher than,” and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some complex sentence forms, including contrast clauses beginning with “While,” and the main comparisons can usually be understood. However, control is inconsistent, and several sentences contain multiple grammatical problems. For example, “people buying … in last 4 weeks” lacks a correctly formed clause and article use; “the proportion … is considerably high … the the fresh and instant coffee” has faulty sentence construction; and “the Hobart has” and “the Brisbane had” show problems with articles and subject phrasing. There are also agreement and tense inconsistencies, as in “percentages … was,” alongside punctuation issues where clauses are joined awkwardly. Build shorter, complete sentences first, then add contrast clauses with correct subjects and verb forms.

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