Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

According to the survey the chart shows the percentage of buing a cofee or tea in five different countries in sydney 40 percent to sixty percent people bought a cofee or tea for drink .moreover;in melbourne city people bought sixty two percent cofee or tea in addidtionally in Brisbane people like to buy fifty fifve percent cofee or tea.furthermore in Adelaide peoplr boght fifty perce3nt cofee or tea.or in last in hobart country people boght sixty three percent coffee or tea.overall the people of melbourne city have a craze for drinling the coffee and tea also they boght highest percentage of coffee .while the people of sydney boght least percentage .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You identify the chart’s general subject and mention all five cities, with some figures that broadly match café visits, such as about 62% in Melbourne and 63% in Hobart. However, the response does not accurately summarise the three separate behaviours: it repeatedly describes people buying “coffee or tea,” rather than distinguishing fresh coffee, instant coffee, and café visits. The claim that Sydney had the lowest percentage is also misleading: it had the lowest café figure, but not the lowest result across all categories. There is no clear overview of the main pattern, and several figures are unclear or inaccurate. The response is also 39 words below the required minimum. Report the key comparisons across all three series and include a concise overview before the details.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic sequence through the cities and uses linking expressions such as “moreover,” “furthermore,” and “overall,” so the reader can see an attempt to organise the information. However, the progression is largely a list, with no paragraphing or clear separation between an overview and supporting details. Several transitions are awkward or inaccurate—for example, “or in last in hobart”—and the semicolon and full stops do not reliably mark sentence boundaries. The repeated city-by-city pattern also makes the account difficult to follow because the categories being compared are not stated. Group the information into an overview and a detail paragraph, and use clear comparisons between the three behaviours rather than a chain of loosely connected statements.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use a small set of relevant terms, including “percentage,” “survey,” and “overall,” and the reader can generally recognise the topic. However, vocabulary is limited and repetitive: “bought a coffee or tea” is used where the chart distinguishes fresh coffee, instant coffee, and café visits. Several word choices and collocations are unclear, such as “have a craze for drinling” and “percentage of coffee,” while spelling errors including “buing,” “cofee,” and “addidtionally” reduce accuracy. These problems sometimes make the intended meaning difficult to identify. Build a precise set of chart-description phrases, such as “the proportion who bought instant coffee” and “visited a café,” and check spelling before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to connect ideas in longer sentences, for example with “moreover” and “while,” but most clauses follow a similar simple pattern and control is inconsistent. Sentence boundaries are often missing or unclear: the opening runs into “moreover;in melbourne,” and the final comparison joins two ideas without a well-formed structure. There are also errors in articles, agreement, and sentence construction, as in “the percentage of buing” and “the people of sydney … have a craze.” Capitalisation and punctuation are unreliable, making the text harder to read. Practise writing complete sentences with one clear comparison in each, and use accurate forms such as “In Melbourne, 63% visited a café” and “Sydney’s figure was lower.”

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