Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

the bar chart illustrates the result of a survey about people coffe and tea buying and drinking habits in five australian cities overall,melbourne increase sydney and hobart silghtly below this level,while brisbane short increase other adelaide below this level.

melbourne 64% increase of city residents whereas hobart 63% and sydney 61% approximately below this level.while adelaide reached about50% of city resident .other level barisbane approximately55% increase while bought fresh coffee in last 4 weeks in sydney 44% the shows that in five australian cities .whereas the melbourne andgobart were increase in five city resident .while the coffee and tea buying different part serve in five cities the percentage of city resident increase in australia .they coffee and tea went to last week in the cities.all cities went to cafe for coffe or tea in the last 4 week. all cities drinking habits slightly increase and decrease in the resident.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You identify the chart’s general subject and include some relevant café figures, such as Melbourne at about 64%, Hobart at 63%, Sydney at 61%, and Adelaide at roughly 50%. However, the overview is unclear and does not accurately summarise the main pattern: café visits were highest in Melbourne and Hobart, while instant coffee purchases were highest in Hobart and fresh coffee purchases were generally lower. The claim that “all cities” show habits that “slightly increase and decrease” is too vague to report the data meaningfully, and several comparisons are difficult to interpret. You also report only one fresh-coffee figure and omit the other two survey categories’ city-by-city comparisons. The response is 139 words, below the 150-word minimum; 10 words copied from the prompt were excluded from the count.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is an attempt to move from an opening statement to figures for café visits and then to fresh coffee, so some relevant information is grouped together. However, the response does not develop in a clear sequence: the opening overview is hard to understand, and the later sentences shift between café attendance, fresh coffee, and general comments without a consistent comparison structure. Connectors such as “whereas,” “while,” and “other” are used repeatedly, but they do not always show a clear relationship between the figures. For example, “while Brisbane short increase other Adelaide below this level” leaves the comparison unclear. Organise the report into a brief overview followed by paragraphs comparing the three categories, and use linking words only where their relationship is precise.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “bar chart,” “survey,” “percentage,” “residents,” and “bought fresh coffee,” which helps identify the subject. However, the range is repetitive and several word choices make the meaning difficult to follow. Phrases such as “increase of city residents” and “short increase” do not accurately describe percentages in a chart, while “other level” and “different part serve” are unclear. There are also spelling errors in key words, including “coffe,” “silghtly,” and “barisbane,” which reduce clarity. Aim for precise reporting language such as “accounted for,” “was higher than,” and “the proportion who visited a café,” and check spelling of city names and category labels.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to combine ideas using clauses with “whereas” and “while,” and it includes some simple statements about the figures. However, sentence boundaries and clause structure are often difficult to follow. For instance, “overall,melbourne increase sydney and hobart silghtly below this level” lacks a clear grammatical relationship, and “the melbourne andgobart were increase” has an incorrect verb construction. Articles, plurals, and agreement are also inconsistent, as in “five city resident” and “all cities went to cafe.” Capitalisation and punctuation are weak, with long run-on sequences and missing spaces after commas. Build shorter, complete sentences first, then add accurate comparisons using forms such as “Melbourne had the highest figure, while Hobart was slightly lower.”

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