Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar graph illustrates the result of a survey about people's coffee and tea purchasing and drinking habit in five Australian cities

Overall, in Hobart and Melbourne are at the highest while Brisbane at the second lowest and Adelaide is at the lowest.

In Melbourne and Hobart people bought almost 65% went to a cafe for coffee while in Sydney thet get 61% which is 2nd highest portion. Individuals was at lowest number go to cafe for tea in Adelaide which is below 50% on the second number Hobart and basbrinae is in the same boat for buying instant coffee in contrast sydeny at the lowest point of buying instant coffee in last 4 weeks.

Sydney was at the top of buying a fresh coffee while Adelaide and brisbane were at the lowest point of buying fresh coffee which is less then 30% in last 4 weeks. Malborone is also the same like wise Sydney little bit difference.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the chart’s subject and make an attempt to summarise differences between cities, including café visits and coffee purchases. However, the overview is unclear and partly inaccurate: “Hobart and Melbourne are at the highest” does not specify which measure, and Adelaide is not lowest across all categories. Several comparisons misread the data. Sydney, not Hobart or Melbourne, has the highest fresh-coffee figure, while Adelaide and Brisbane are tied at about 34.5%, not below 30%. Sydney also does not have the lowest instant-coffee figure; Hobart does. To make the response more complete and accurate, give a clear overview of the main patterns across all three categories, then support it with correctly selected comparisons.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response has some basic organisation: it begins by introducing the chart, gives a brief overall statement, and then discusses café visits and coffee purchases. However, the progression is difficult to follow because several different comparisons are crowded into long sentences, such as the sentence beginning “Individuals was at lowest number go to cafe.” Connections between ideas are also unclear, and phrases such as “in contrast” do not consistently signal an accurate or complete comparison. The final paragraph shifts to fresh coffee without a clear transition. Use separate, focused paragraphs for the overview and key details, and group related figures together. Clear sentence boundaries and explicit comparisons would help readers follow the information.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “bar graph,” “survey,” “highest,” “lowest,” and “portion,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make the meaning difficult to interpret. For example, “in the same boat” is too informal for an academic report, while “at the top of buying a fresh coffee” and “second number Hobart” are not natural ways to describe data. There are also spelling errors, including “thet,” “basbrinae,” “sydeny,” and “Malborone,” which reduce clarity. Aim for precise reporting language such as “recorded,” “accounted for,” and “ranked,” and check spelling and word forms carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a few longer sentence forms, including comparisons introduced by “while” and “which,” but control is inconsistent. Errors in sentence structure and agreement appear in examples such as “Overall, in Hobart and Melbourne are at the highest” and “Individuals was at lowest number go to cafe.” Missing or incorrect articles and verb forms also affect clarity, as in “people bought almost 65% went to a cafe.” Some sentences run together without effective punctuation, making relationships between ideas hard to identify. Practise writing complete, direct sentences with a clear subject and verb, for example, “Café visits were highest in Melbourne and Hobart.” Then add one comparison at a time and check agreement, articles, and punctuation.

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