Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The bar chart illustrates the proportions of persons coffee, tea buying and dinking habits in five cities of Australia in four weeks.

Overall, percentages of the peoples who went to a cafe for coffee or tea was greater in all cities whereas individuals who bought instant coffee was less than fifty five percent in all cities. In contrast, fresh bought coffee contained the least percentages.

The cities, particularly Melbourne, Hobart and Sydney occupied largest ratio of residents who went to cafe for coffee or tea in last 4 weeks, at 64%, 63% and 61% respectively. While, Brisbane and Adelaide accounted for 56% and 49% respectively.

Hobart and Brisbane showed relatively greater percentages of people who bought instant coffee, at 54.5% and 53%. Adelaide contained half of the percentages og people. While, citizens who bought instant coffee in Melbourne and Sydney showed a decline of 47% and 45.5%.

Sydney accompained for nearly 44% of individuals who bought fresh coffee followed by Melbourne, at 43%. Whereas Hobart figured 38% of fresh coffee buyers. Brisbane and Adelaide contained relatively same ratio of brought fresh coffee, at 34.5%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

You cover all three measures and provide a clear overview: café visits are highest in every city, while fresh-coffee purchases are generally the lowest. The comparisons are mostly accurate, including the high café figures for Melbourne, Hobart and Sydney and the similar fresh-coffee results for Brisbane and Adelaide. You also report the main city-by-city patterns rather than listing every figure. However, the overview’s claim that instant-coffee purchases were “less than fifty five percent in all cities” is imprecise: Hobart is approximately 54.5%, close to that threshold, and the wording does not identify the contrast between café visits and instant purchases as clearly as it could. A more precise overview and consistently accurate figures would strengthen an otherwise well-selected account.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs comparing café visits, instant coffee and fresh coffee. This makes the main categories easy to follow, and phrases such as “followed by” and “whereas” help signal comparisons. The organisation is coherent, but some linking is mechanical or awkward. For example, “While, Brisbane and Adelaide…” is not a complete sentence, and several sentences begin with “While” or “Whereas” without being joined to a main clause. The paragraphing also separates each measure rather than grouping related highs and lows across categories. To make progression smoother, use complete contrast structures and connect comparisons more naturally, while retaining the useful overview-first organisation.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “proportions,” “accounted for,” “followed by” and “relatively same ratio,” and the reader can generally identify the categories being compared. However, word choice and collocation are often inaccurate or unnatural, which limits precision: “persons coffee, tea buying and dinking habits,” “contained the least percentages,” and “accompanied for” do not express the intended meanings naturally. There are also spelling and word-form slips, such as “dinking” and “og.” Repeating “percentages” and “individuals” makes the description less fluent. Aim for standard chart-reporting phrases such as “the proportion of residents who…” and “accounted for,” and use “share” or “figure” selectively to avoid repetition.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of sentence forms, including comparisons and subordinate clauses, and the overall meaning is usually recoverable. However, errors in sentence construction and agreement occur often enough to make some lines difficult to read. For example, “percentages … was greater” has a subject–verb agreement problem, while “While, Brisbane and Adelaide accounted for…” is a fragment rather than a complete sentence. The opening phrase also lacks a clear grammatical structure, and “Hobart and Brisbane showed … percentages … at 54.5% and 53%” needs clearer parallel construction. Articles and prepositions are also inconsistent in phrases such as “went to cafe.” Build each comparison around a complete clause, check singular/plural agreement, and proofread punctuation around contrast clauses.

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