Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

This bar graph illustrate the results of a survey too peoples coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five city of australia.

The overall gives information in givan they have five cites of australia are name is syden,melboume,brisbane,adelaide and hobart.This graph have give a persentage of citys in last 4 weeks fresh tea instant coffee and last is cafe's.they have collum is gave a paesentage 20% too 70% and the row is show the city's.

The first city is Sydney in this city fresh coffee bought the 44% and instant coffee is 41% and last in cafe's bought coffee and tea is 64% in last 4 weeks next city is Melbourme the fresh coffee average is 43% and instant coffee is on 48% and cafe's is on 63% this is a highest cafe's paesentage of given five city's.

The brisbane fresh coffee persentage in last 4 weeks is 34% and instant coffee is 53% and cafe is on 55% in last 4 weeks and second last city is Adeliade in this city the fresh coffee in last 4 weeks on 34% and something the instant coffee is on 50% and last the cafe is on 49% in last weeks city residence.The last one is hobart in this city last 4 weeks the fresh coffee are on 38% and naxt is instant coffee is on 54% and the last is cafe is on 63% in last 4 weeks. The fresh coffee lowest persentage is in Brisbane nas inatant coffee is in Sydney and cafe is in Adelaide.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the chart’s subject and report figures for all five cities, including useful comparisons such as Adelaide having the lowest café figure and instant coffee being relatively high in Hobart and Brisbane. However, the response does not give a clear, accurate overview of the main patterns, and several figures are misreported: Sydney’s instant coffee is about 45.5%, not 41%, and its café figure is about 61%, not 64%. Melbourne, rather than Hobart, has the highest café figure, though the two are close. The final claim that Sydney has the lowest instant-coffee percentage is also incorrect; it is the highest. Focus on the main trends and check each comparison against the chart. (Nine words copied from the task prompt were not counted.)

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic, helpful structure: an introduction, a general description, and paragraphs that move through the cities in sequence. This makes most of the information possible to follow. However, there is little overall progression from an overview to selected details, and the city-by-city listing becomes repetitive. Linking expressions such as “The first city,” “next city,” and “the last one” mainly mark sequence rather than show meaningful comparisons. Some sentences also run together, especially in the Brisbane and Adelaide section, making relationships between figures less clear. Group cities by a shared pattern—for example, café attendance or instant-coffee purchases—and use concise comparisons to create a clearer progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “percentage,” “fresh coffee,” “instant coffee,” and “last 4 weeks,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is basic and repetitive, and frequent spelling and word-choice errors sometimes strain the reader: “persentage,” “cites,” “collum,” and “cafe’s” recur or are inaccurate. Some phrases are also unnatural, such as “the fresh coffee bought the 44%” and “the overall gives information.” Use precise reporting language and standard spellings, and avoid using “average” when you mean a city’s figure. More varied terms such as “proportion,” “stood at,” and “recorded” would help describe the data clearly and efficiently.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, and the reader can usually identify which city and category you are describing. However, the range of accurate sentence structures is very limited, with frequent errors in agreement, articles, plurals, and sentence construction. For example, “This bar graph illustrate” needs a singular verb, while “five city” and “the fresh coffee are” show number-agreement problems. The opening description, “The overall gives information in givan,” is difficult to interpret grammatically. Several long sentences join multiple facts without clear punctuation, which further obscures meaning. Practise accurate simple comparison sentences first, then combine them using controlled clauses, such as “In Sydney, café attendance was higher than fresh-coffee purchases.”

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