Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The given chart illustarte that the people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

The percentage of people in Sydney in last four weeks who went to a cafe for coffee or tea was 61% it means people highly recomended to go a cafe for coffee or tea. In an other city of Australia, Melbourne the ratio of people who went to a cafe for coffee or tea was 64% majority of people recomended to go outside for coffe or tea and it was rose by 3% as compared with Sydney. In Birsbane the only a people went outside for coffe or tea nearly 55.5% as compared to the people of Sydney and Melbourne. In Adelaide the percentage of people was dropped to 49% who went out cafe for tea or coffee. The people of Hobart highly recomended to went a cafe for coffee or tea overall the percentage was 63.5%.

The people of Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane, Adelaide and Hobart who bought fresh coffee in last four weeks, In sydney the percentage of people who bought fresh coffee was 44% and who went outside to bought instant coffee was 45.5%. In Melbourne the percentage of people who bought fresh coffee in past four weeks was dropped as compared to the Sydney by 2% overall the ratio was 42% and the people who bought instant coffee in last four weeks was 48% which was rose as compared to the Sydney by

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the three activities and report several relevant figures, including café visits in Sydney and Adelaide and fresh and instant coffee purchases in Sydney and Melbourne. However, the response does not provide a clear overview of the main patterns, and it ends partway through a comparison, leaving Brisbane, Adelaide and Hobart’s coffee-purchase results largely unreported. Some figures are slightly inaccurate, such as Melbourne café visits (about 63.5%, not 64%, a minor difference) and Hobart café visits (about 63%, not 63.5%). More importantly, phrases such as “highly recommended” interpret the survey as a recommendation rather than reporting what residents did. Select the key highs and lows, summarise them in an overview, and compare the three activities accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic sequence: it first discusses café visits and then turns to coffee purchases. This gives the reader some sense of the chart’s categories, and city names help signal changes in focus. However, the first paragraph is a long chain of city-by-city statements, with repeated wording and limited comparison across the full set of cities. The second paragraph begins a fresh comparison but stops after Melbourne, so the progression is incomplete. Some links, such as “it means” and “as compared with,” do not clearly express the relationship between the data. Use separate, purposeful paragraphs for an overview and key comparisons, and connect figures by highlighting patterns rather than listing cities one at a time.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “percentage,” “ratio,” “bought fresh coffee,” and “instant coffee,” so the topic is generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several expressions are repeated, especially “people who went to a cafe for coffee or tea.” Some word choices misrepresent the data: “recommended” suggests advice or preference, while the chart records reported behaviour; “went outside” is also not a natural way to describe visiting a café. Spelling errors such as “illustarte,” “Birsbane,” and “coffe” further reduce accuracy. Aim for concise, precise reporting language, such as “the proportion who visited a café,” and check spelling and collocations before finishing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts longer sentences and comparisons, but sentence structures are often incomplete or difficult to follow. For example, “The percentage of people in Sydney in last four weeks who went to a cafe … was 61% it means…” joins two clauses without suitable punctuation or a linking structure. There are also recurring problems with articles and verb forms, as in “in an other city,” “the only a people,” and “highly recomended to went.” Capitalisation and punctuation are inconsistent, and the final sentence breaks off after “by,” leaving the comparison unfinished. These errors sometimes obscure relationships between ideas. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with controlled clauses using “while,” “whereas,” or “compared with.”

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