Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The given bar chart illustrates that the results of survey about some individuals coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five different cities in Australia like Sydney,Melbourne,Brisbane,Adelade and Hobart.

Overall, it can be seen that the ratio of people's who went to cafe for coffee or tea shops in last 4 weeks were stand at dominat position as compared the ratio of whose individuals who bought fresh coffee in last 4 weeks were seen at lowest position while the second highest ratio of whose individuals who bought instant coffee in last 4 weeks among the all five cities.

According to the given bar chart, the highest percentage of people's who went cafe for coffee or tea in last 4 year in sydney city his ratio almost 62% and the ratio of who went to bought instant coffee his ratio 45% and the ratio people's who went to bought fresh coffee his ratio approximately 48%. On the other hand, the ratio of people's who went to bought coffee or tea and fresh coffee or instant coffee in Melbourne his ratio almost 64%,48% and 43% in melbourne.

It is apparently seen that the ratio of indivduals who bought to tea,fresh coffee and instant coffee in Brisbanne his ratio approximately 55%, 53% and 35%. On the other side, the percentage of individuals remained same who went to bought tea or instant coffee in Adelade his were both stand at 50% while the ratio peoples who went to bought fesh coffee his ratio 35% and the ratio of whose peoples who went to bought tea, instant coffee and fresh coffee his ratio almost 63%,55% and 38% in Hobart.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the chart’s subject and include an overview, noting that café visits are generally the leading activity and fresh-coffee purchases are often lower. You also report figures for all five cities, so the response is relevant and covers the main categories. However, several comparisons are unclear or inaccurate: for Sydney, fresh coffee is about 44%, not 48%; in Brisbane, instant coffee is about 53%, not fresh coffee; and Adelaide’s café figure is about 50%, rather than being clearly distinguished from instant coffee. The overview also overgeneralises: café visits are not highest in Sydney, and fresh coffee is not the lowest activity in every city. Select the key highs, lows and exceptions more accurately, then support the overview with clear comparisons.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview and two detail paragraphs, with the cities grouped in a broadly understandable order. Linking phrases such as “Overall,” “On the other hand” and “It is apparently seen” show an attempt to guide the reader. However, progression is weakened by repeated, lengthy patterns such as “the ratio of people’s who went to…” and by unclear references, including “his ratio” and “his were both.” The final sentence also combines several Hobart figures in a way that makes the comparisons difficult to follow. Organise the details into shorter, parallel comparisons—for example, compare the three activities for each city using consistent labels—and use linking words only where they clarify a contrast.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “bar chart,” “percentage,” “survey,” and the activity labels, and you attempt to describe rankings with phrases such as “highest percentage” and “lowest position.” However, the range is limited and several expressions are inaccurate or unnatural, which sometimes makes the intended meaning difficult to interpret. Examples include “ratio of people’s,” “went to bought,” “dominant position,” and “in last 4 year.” There are also spelling errors in city names and key words, such as “Adelade,” “Brisbanne” and “fesh.” Use the chart’s own precise terms—“proportion of residents,” “bought fresh coffee,” and “visited a café”—and check spelling and collocations carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt longer sentences and use basic structures to introduce the chart and describe comparisons, but control is inconsistent. Errors in agreement and sentence construction recur, as in “the ratio … were stand” and “his ratio almost 62%,” while “the ratio of people’s who…” shows problems with noun phrases and relative clauses. Several sentences join many figures without a clear grammatical structure, particularly the final sentence about Hobart. Punctuation and capitalisation are also inconsistent, including city names and spacing around commas. Practise accurate simple comparison patterns first, such as “The proportion who visited a café was about 62%,” then vary them with controlled clauses. Clear sentence boundaries and consistent subject–verb agreement would make the data easier to understand.

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