Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The bar chart compares the data collected about public coffee and tea purchasing and drinking habits in five cities in australia.

Overall, the proportion of people who bought coffee or tea in last 4 weeks was higher than instant and fresh coffee buyers in all five cities. In Sydney and Melbourne, the individuals who bought fresh coffee were closed to instant coffee buyers, while in other cities instant was more popular than fresh coffee.

Melbourne was the city containing the highest proportion of around 63% of people, while the lowest ratio was in Adelaide, recording 49% approximately. The second highest precentage of coffee and tea buying in last 4 weeks was recorded in Hobart, while Sydney was at 61% and Brisbane was at 55%, respectively.

The proportion of fresh and instant coffee buyers in Sydney was very close, recording around 43% and 45% respectively, while, notably; the ratio for both entities far from each other, showing 33% and 53% in Brisbane, respectively. People in Hobart and Adelaide more likely to use instant coffee showing nearly equal consumption recording 44% and 43%, and similar trend in buying fresh coffee showing 33% and 34%, respectively. Melbourne had a moderate difference in ratio, displaying 42% for fresh coffee and 47% for instant.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main pattern accurately: café visits are the most common activity in every city, and instant coffee is more popular than fresh coffee outside Sydney and Melbourne. The overview and comparisons are relevant, and most reported figures are close to the chart. Your account of café visits is particularly clear, including Melbourne and Hobart as the highest and Adelaide as the lowest. Some details, however, are less accurate: Hobart’s instant-coffee figure is about 55%, not 44%, and its fresh-coffee figure is about 39%, not 43%; Adelaide’s fresh figure is about 35%, rather than 34%. The response therefore covers the task well overall, but more careful checking of individual figures and fuller precision in the comparisons would strengthen it further.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, an overview, and then paragraphs comparing café visits and coffee purchases. This makes the main information easy to follow. Linking expressions such as “Overall,” “while,” and “respectively” help connect comparisons, although some are used awkwardly or make relationships less clear. For example, “The second highest … was recorded in Hobart, while Sydney was at 61% and Brisbane was at 55%” interrupts the ranking with figures that do not follow the stated order. The final paragraph also moves between cities without a fully consistent sequence. Grouping the café figures together, then comparing fresh and instant coffee in a fixed city order, would create smoother progression and clearer referencing.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use a suitable range of vocabulary for describing chart data, including “proportion,” “recording,” “moderate difference,” and “more popular.” These choices show an attempt to vary language rather than repeat “percentage” throughout. However, some word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “the city containing the highest proportion,” “closed to instant coffee buyers,” and “both entities far from each other.” “Precentage” is also misspelled, and “coffee and tea buying” is not a precise label for the café-going category. Choose standard chart language such as “the highest proportion was recorded in,” “close to,” and “the figures differed considerably.” More accurate collocations would make your comparisons sound clearer and more natural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, including clauses with “while” and participial phrases such as “recording around 43% and 45%.” Most sentences communicate the intended comparisons, but some grammatical errors remain. For example, “in last 4 weeks” needs an article (“in the last four weeks”), and “People in Hobart and Adelaide more likely” is missing the verb “were.” The construction “the ratio for both entities far from each other” also lacks a finite verb, while the semicolon in “notably; the ratio” is not appropriate. Some sentences combine several comparisons, making these errors harder to notice. Check articles, required verbs, and punctuation, and use shorter sentence structures when presenting multiple figures.

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