Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Australia is the one of the most high ranked and well known country on this earth,there are so many states in this country.People of this country have too much interest to go out in cafe for tea and coffee.Now according to the recent news we saw a result that shows the majority of people go on cafe for tea and coffee.In Sydney,there are number of people almost 61% went for a coffee and tea although the ratio of coffee is more than 45% while the ratio of tea is less than 45. Now in Melbourne which has higher population,archieved almost 63% of people goal who visit cafe and almost 48% ratio of coffee lovers while 42% ratio of tea lovers.In Brisbane ratio of cafe visit is about to 55% while coffee selling ratio is 53% and tea is about to 34% and it's very low ratio compared to others.While in Adelaide the ratio of cafe visitors is almost 49% and almost 50% ratio of the coffee lover since last week and 34% is for tea. At the last Hobart,it have almost same ratio of cafe visitors like Melbourne with 54% coffee selling in last 4 weeks and 37% about to tea

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the three broad activities and include several figures, so the response is recognisably about the chart. However, the account only minimally reports the data and does not give a clear, accurate overview of the main patterns. For example, café attendance is highest in Melbourne and Hobart, while fresh coffee purchases are lower than instant coffee purchases in every city; these useful comparisons are not clearly summarised. Several figures are assigned to the wrong categories: the chart shows fresh coffee at about 44% in Sydney, not tea, and café attendance in Hobart at about 63%, not 54%. The references to “recent news,” population, and “last week” are unsupported or inaccurate. Focus on the chart’s three stated measures and report their key highs, lows, and comparisons accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response moves through the five cities in chart order, and words such as “Now,” “While,” and “At the last” signal some progression. However, the information is presented as one long paragraph, with no clear introduction or separate overview, so the reader has to work to identify the main message. The repeated city-by-city pattern also makes the account feel like a list rather than a comparison of the three measures. Some links are unclear, particularly “although the ratio of coffee is more than 45% while the ratio of tea is less than 45,” because the chart does not report tea purchases. Organise the response into an introduction, a concise overview, and detail paragraphs grouped by meaningful comparisons; use clear references to fresh coffee, instant coffee, and café visits.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use a basic range of topic-related vocabulary, including “ratio,” “people,” “coffee,” “cafe,” and “visitors,” and the reader can generally recognise the subject. However, vocabulary is repetitive and several choices are inaccurate or unnatural for describing a chart. “Coffee lovers” and “tea lovers” do not match the chart’s purchase categories, while “achieved almost 63% of people goal” is difficult to interpret. Phrases such as “high ranked,” “too much interest,” and “coffee selling ratio” also reduce precision. Use the chart’s exact categories and standard reporting language, such as “the proportion who bought instant coffee” or “the percentage who visited a café.” This would make the limited vocabulary more accurate and easier to understand.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt some longer sentences and use clauses with “while” and “although,” but control is inconsistent, and errors frequently make relationships between ideas unclear. Examples include “Australia is the one of the most … country,” “which has higher population,” and “it have almost same ratio,” where articles, agreement, and sentence structure are faulty. Several sentences run together without appropriate punctuation, as in the opening, and the city descriptions often join multiple comparisons into one sentence. Tense and phrasing are also unstable in “61% went for a coffee and tea.” Practise accurate simple reporting structures first—for example, “About 61% visited a café”—then combine them with controlled comparisons. Check articles, subject–verb agreement, and sentence boundaries during revision.

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