Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar chart illustrates the consequences of a survey about drinking and purchasing coffee and tea habits in five main cities of Australia.

Overall, it is evident from the chart the percentage of drinking and purchasing fresh coffee remained higher ranging from 60 to 65% in all countries. While, the percentage of buying instant coffee fluctuated respectively.

The percentage of drinking and and purchasing fresh coffee in top five australian countries slightly different in sydney. On the other hand, the percentage of drinking and buying coffee from cafe remained higher in remaining four countries except sydney.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

You identify the chart’s general subject and attempt an overview, but the key features are substantially misreported. The claim that fresh-coffee figures were 60–65% is incorrect: they are roughly 35–44%, while café visits are generally the highest category. The statement that café figures were higher in four cities “except sydney” also reverses the pattern, since Sydney’s café figure is about 61%, above its fresh- and instant-coffee figures. No accurate city-by-city comparisons or supporting figures are provided, and the response is 54 words below the required minimum. To improve, report the main overall pattern accurately, then support it with selected comparisons across the five cities.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response, with an opening sentence, an overview beginning “Overall,” and a final paragraph. However, the ideas do not develop in a clear sequence: the overview makes an inaccurate claim, and the final paragraph repeats the categories without explaining their relationships or comparing cities. Linking is limited and sometimes awkward; “While” begins a fragment, and “On the other hand” does not introduce a clear contrast. The reader can identify the topic, but the progression is weak and the paragraphing does not help present the chart systematically. A clearer structure would give an accurate overview first, followed by grouped comparisons supported by figures.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some relevant chart vocabulary, including “percentage,” “survey,” “fresh coffee,” and “instant coffee,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several choices are inaccurate or unnatural: “consequences of a survey” does not mean survey results, “countries” is used for cities, and “drinking and purchasing” is an awkward description of the chart’s categories. Repetition of “percentage” and “coffee” also limits flexibility. These choices sometimes make the intended comparison difficult to understand. Use precise reporting language such as “proportions,” “residents,” “bought,” and “visited a café,” and vary expressions while keeping the chart’s categories exact.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a few sentence forms, including an overview with “While” and a contrast introduced by “On the other hand,” but control is inconsistent. For example, “it is evident from the chart the percentage…” is missing “that,” and “While, the percentage…” is an incomplete subordinate clause. The phrase “remained higher ranging” is not formed correctly, while “slightly different” lacks a suitable verb construction. There are also agreement and punctuation problems, including the repeated “and and” and inconsistent capitalisation of city names. These errors make several statements hard to follow. Practise complete clauses and straightforward comparisons, then check verb forms, articles, and sentence boundaries.

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