Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar chart illustrates the result of a survey and show proportion of people who in live Austraillia diffirent five cities who buys coffee,tea and other drinking items.

Overall, melbourne city is peak at campare the other cities with all categories of drinking tea and coffee.While the adelaide city is down ward in this regard of all types of tea in last four weeks duration.

Firstly, among all of the residents who live in Australlia most widely known city is Sdyney, only 43% of the residents drinks and buy fresh coffee,Morever,the proportion of who buy bought intant coffee is slightly is up side with 45% of the all residents.Additionally, the percentage who went for both of coffee and tea is 62% of the residents.Subsequently, the melbourne city is peak at is tbis way with 64% of proportion previous 4 week. morelike, the Brisbane city only domineat 55% of the residents.finally, the people who live in Adelaide and hobart is same as in fresh and instant coffee,Consequently, the people who visit for coffe and tea is 60% of the proportion.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

The response identifies the chart’s general subject and attempts an overview, noting that café visits are high and Adelaide is comparatively low. However, the overview is inaccurate: Melbourne is not highest in every category, since Hobart has the greatest instant-coffee figure and Sydney leads fresh-coffee purchases. Several comparisons are also unclear or incorrect. For example, the statement that Adelaide and Hobart are “same as in fresh and instant coffee” does not match the data, and the café figures for Brisbane and Hobart are not reported accurately. The response therefore selects only a limited set of relevant features and does not summarise the main patterns reliably. To improve, give a precise overview and compare the three categories across the cities using accurate, clearly attributed figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is an attempt to organise the response with an opening, an overview, and a body paragraph, and sequencing words such as “Firstly,” “Additionally,” and “finally” show an effort to guide the reader. However, the information does not progress in a clear, consistent way: the body moves from Sydney to Melbourne, then Brisbane, and then combines Adelaide and Hobart without explaining the comparisons. Some linking expressions, including “Subsequently” and “Consequently,” do not show a clear relationship between the ideas they connect. The overview also repeats broad claims rather than setting out the chart’s main patterns. Grouping cities or categories systematically and using simpler, more precise transitions would make the report easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some task-related vocabulary, including “proportion,” “residents,” “fresh coffee,” and “instant coffee,” so the reader can recognise the topic. However, the range is basic and several word choices or collocations make the meaning difficult to follow. Phrases such as “peak at campare,” “down ward,” “most widely known city,” and “domineat” are inaccurate or unsuitable for describing chart data. Spelling errors, including “Austraillia,” “Sdyney,” and “intant,” further reduce clarity. Aim for standard reporting language and accurate forms: for example, describe a figure as “the highest proportion” or say that it “stood at” a percentage. Check spelling and avoid phrases that do not express a clear comparison.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts a few longer sentences and uses basic comparison structures, but grammatical control is weak and errors frequently make relationships between ideas unclear. For example, “the result of a survey and show proportion” has faulty verb agreement and an incomplete noun phrase, while “people who in live” has an incorrect clause structure. There are also repeated problems with subject–verb agreement and sentence boundaries, as in “the people who live in Adelaide and hobart is same.” Capitalisation and punctuation are inconsistent, with several sentences joined or separated awkwardly. Build accurate simple sentences first, then add controlled clauses. Check that each subject has the correct verb and that every sentence has a clear main clause.

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