Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The bar chart compares the data of consumption of coffee and tea in five cities of Australia such as Sydney,Melbourne,Brisbane, Adelaide and Hobart in last four weeks.

Overall, residents of Hobart,Melbourne and Sydney have higher percentage of going to a cafe for coffee and tea as compare to the Brisbane and Adelaide. Furthuremore the percentages of getting instant coffee is almost same in all the cities and the data on purchasing fresh coffee shows that Brisbane and Adelaide have relatively low percentage as compare to the other three cities of Australia.

Moreover, in Sydney people goes to cafe for caffee shows almost 60 percent instead of instant coffee which is only 45 percent but on the other hand in Adelaide people likes to get instant coffee shows more than 50 percent more than going for a cafe and rest of the cities prefer going in the cafe in last four weeks.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the chart’s main pattern: café visits are highest in Sydney, Melbourne and Hobart, while Brisbane and Adelaide are lower, and fresh-coffee purchases are relatively low in Brisbane and Adelaide. You also make relevant comparisons between Sydney’s café visits and instant coffee, and between Adelaide’s instant coffee and café figures. However, the overview is not fully precise: instant-coffee figures vary from about 45.5% to 54.5%, so describing them as “almost same” is too broad. The final comparison also says the other cities prefer cafés, although instant coffee exceeds café visits in Brisbane. Include a few more accurate city-by-city figures and clarify these exceptions to make the key features more fully supported.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure, moving from an introduction to an overview and then to specific comparisons. “Overall” and “Moreover” help signal these stages, and the reader can follow the broad message. However, the final sentence combines several comparisons in a long, loosely connected structure, especially the shift from Sydney to Adelaide and then to “the rest of the cities.” This makes the comparison difficult to track and leads to an unclear generalisation. The overview also repeats ideas that could be organised more distinctly. Use separate sentences or paragraphs for the overall trends and selected city details, and make each comparison explicit—for example, state which measure is higher in each city.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant task vocabulary, including “percentage,” “instant coffee,” “purchasing fresh coffee,” and “going to a cafe,” so the topic is generally clear. There are also attempts to vary expressions, such as “getting instant coffee” and “purchasing fresh coffee.” However, several choices are imprecise or unnatural for describing survey data: “compares the data of consumption,” “getting instant coffee,” and “people likes to get instant coffee.” Spelling errors such as “Furthuremore” and “caffee” also reduce accuracy. Aim for concise, conventional collocations such as “the proportion of residents who bought” and “visited a café.” More precise vocabulary would help distinguish buying coffee from going to a café.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a contrast introduced by “but on the other hand,” and the main message is usually understandable. However, errors in agreement and sentence construction recur. For example, “people goes” should be “people go,” while “people likes” should be “people like.” The phrase “in last four weeks” needs an article (“in the last four weeks”), and the final sentence lacks a clear grammatical structure around “people likes to get instant coffee shows more than 50 percent.” Commas are also missing after city names in the opening list. Build comparisons with complete clauses and check subject–verb agreement, articles and punctuation; this will make your varied sentence attempts more controlled.

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