Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The chart depicts the result of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five australian cities.

Overview:

overall from the graph it is clear that Melbourne has the highest percent in went to a cafe for coffee or tea in last 4 weeks.And Adelaide has the lowest percent among all the other cities.

From the graph we can say that Melbourne has the highest percent which is about almost 70%.It is the highest percent in the chart.Then HObart has the second highest percent in the chart.Which is 62.5%.After that,Sydney,brisbane has the percent of almost 45%,45%,above 60%,almost 35%,52.5%,55% respectively.Finally,Adelaide has less than 50%.which is the lowest in the chart.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You identify the chart topic and attempt an overview, noting that café visits are high and Adelaide is low. However, the overview misidentifies Melbourne as the highest: Hobart is marginally highest for café visits, while Melbourne is close behind. The response also gives no meaningful account of the fresh-coffee and instant-coffee series, and the sequence of figures (“45%, 45%, above 60%, almost 35%, 52.5%, 55%”) is unclear and does not reliably identify cities or categories. The task is only partly addressed, with key comparisons missing and some data inaccurately reported. It is also 48 words below the 150-word minimum, limiting the detail available. To improve, report the main pattern across all three categories and support it with clearly attributed comparisons.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening sentence, an overview, and a further paragraph describing selected figures. Sequencing expressions such as “Then,” “After that,” and “Finally” help signal order. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the figures are listed without consistently naming the city and measure they refer to. The overview is separated by a label, but the body does not develop it in a clear, systematic comparison. Some sentence boundaries also interrupt the flow, as in “Which is 62.5%” and “which is the lowest in the chart.” Group the information by category or by clear city comparisons, and use references that make each figure’s meaning explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses relevant basic vocabulary, including “survey,” “percent,” “highest,” “lowest,” and “chart,” so the general subject is understandable. However, the range is limited and several phrases are repetitive or imprecise, particularly repeated use of “highest percent” and “in the chart.” “Has the percent of” is not a natural way to describe a survey result, and “almost 70%” is an inaccurate description of a value around 63%. Capitalisation and spelling are inconsistent in “australian,” “HObart,” and “brisbane.” Use more precise reporting language and vary expressions—for example, “the proportion of residents,” “recorded,” and “stood at”—while checking city names and matching descriptions to the data.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You produce several simple clauses that communicate the general topic, such as “The chart depicts the result of a survey” and “Adelaide has less than 50%.” There is an attempt to use longer sequencing structures, but sentence control is inconsistent. “Which is 62.5%” is a fragment, and “After that,Sydney,brisbane has the percent…” has faulty sentence construction and unclear agreement. Missing spaces after full stops and commas, along with sentence breaks before “which,” also affect punctuation. Most sentences follow a simple pattern, with little accurate variety. Practise combining comparisons into complete sentences, for example, “Hobart recorded about 63%, slightly above Melbourne,” and check sentence boundaries, agreement, and punctuation.

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