Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar chart illustrats the result of a survey about citizen's three types of coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Overall, the drinking coffee and instant coffee is the highest at hobart cities, whereas fresh coffee is the lowest in brisbane city.

the number of individuals are drinking coffee or tea about at 57 percent in sydney, whereas it is slightly dropped at 34 percent in brisbane, then it sharply increase around at 38 percent in hobart cities. Thus, the percentage of people buy instant coffee approximately at 46 percent in sydney, then it is rise over the period and reach peaked about 53 percent in hobart.

Lastly, the number of is buying fresh coffee about 43 percent in sydney , whereas it decline at 34 percent in brisbane and in

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the chart’s subject and attempt an overview, noting that café visits are high and fresh-coffee purchases are low in Brisbane. However, the overview is inaccurate: café attendance is highest in Melbourne and Hobart, not Hobart alone, while instant coffee is highest in Hobart. Several figures and comparisons are also incomplete or incorrect; for example, Sydney café visits are about 61%, not 57%, and the response does not cover all five cities or finish its final comparison. The answer contains 125 words, below the required 150, which limits the detail available. To improve, give a clear overview of the main patterns, report accurate comparisons across all three categories, and complete the response.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response has a basic structure, beginning with an introduction and overview before moving to details, and words such as “Overall,” “whereas,” and “Lastly” show an attempt to connect ideas. However, progression is difficult to follow because the data are not organised consistently by category or city, and the final sentence stops at “and in,” leaving the comparison unfinished. Some links are also unclear: “Thus” does not express a clear relationship between the café figures and instant-coffee figures. Use separate, complete paragraphs for the overview and grouped details, and make each paragraph follow a clear comparison pattern. This would make the information easier to track.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “percentage,” “approximately,” “survey,” and “decline,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several choices or forms are inaccurate, such as “drinking coffee and instant coffee” when describing the highest category, and “reach peaked,” which is not a natural collocation. “Hobart cities” is also imprecise, and “the number of individuals” is less suitable than language referring to proportions or residents. Spelling errors such as “illustrats” further reduce control. Build a more accurate set of terms for describing survey proportions and trends, and check collocations and spelling before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple and linked sentences, for example, “Overall, … whereas …” and a sentence using “whereas” to compare cities. However, grammatical errors are frequent and sometimes make relationships difficult to understand. Examples include “the number of individuals are,” “the percentage of people buy,” and “then it is rise,” where agreement or verb forms are incorrect. Tense and sentence construction are also inconsistent, and the final clause is incomplete. Punctuation and capitalisation are uneven, including lowercase sentence openings and spaces before commas. Practise accurate present-simple descriptions such as “the percentage of residents who visited” and “it rose,” then check that every sentence has a complete subject and verb.

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