Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar graph provides information about the people who bought tea and coffee and Beverage consumption habit five Australia cities.

Overall, people prefer for go to the cafe and consume drink. the highest similerty both cities. while, Brisbane citiy lowest for instead coffee buy last 4 week. while Sydney fell significantly for fresh coffee.

To begin with, Melbourne and Hobart cities the highest in cafes around 63 percentage. compared to the brisbance and Adelaide. Followed by, 60% people more prefer cafe in last month. However, cafes coffee stood lowest in brisane citiy only 50 percent.

second, people drank more fresh coffee and tea 3higher drink in syden while the figure was decrease in Melbourn. After they slightly fell in four cities. then it habits rise in last urban areas. Furthermore, people more bought instead coffee in last 4 weeks. Hobarts people more drank tea and coffee approximately 54%. before they start stood only 46 percent. Brisbane second highest drank habits.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the chart’s broad subject and attempt an overview, noting that café visits are generally popular and that instant coffee figures are high in Hobart and Brisbane. However, the overview is unclear and includes inaccurate comparisons: café attendance peaks in Melbourne and Hobart, not simply “both cities,” while Adelaide—not Brisbane—has the lowest café figure. Several details are also misreported or difficult to interpret, such as “cafes coffee stood lowest in brisane citiy only 50 percent” and the claim that Sydney’s fresh-coffee figure “fell significantly.” The response does not clearly compare all three categories across the cities, and some statements confuse buying with drinking. Select the highest and lowest values accurately, then summarise the main contrasts before adding supporting figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is an attempt to organise the response into an overview and two body sections, and phrases such as “Overall,” “To begin with,” and “Furthermore” show awareness of linking. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the categories are mixed together and the second body paragraph shifts between fresh coffee, tea, and instant coffee without a clear comparison. Some connectors are used inaccurately or repetitively, including repeated “while” and “After they slightly fell,” which does not make the relationship between ideas clear. Paragraphing is present, but the information within paragraphs is not consistently grouped by category or comparison. A clearer sequence—overview, café visits, then the two coffee-purchasing categories—would make the report easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-related vocabulary, including “bar graph,” “percentage,” “fresh coffee,” “instant coffee,” and “last 4 weeks,” so the reader can recognise the topic. However, the range is limited and many word choices or collocations are inaccurate, sometimes making the meaning hard to understand. Examples include “people prefer for go to the cafe,” “highest similerty,” “instead coffee,” and “drank habits.” There are also spelling errors such as “brisbance,” “syden,” and “Hobarts.” Use precise reporting language such as “the proportion of residents,” “visited a café,” “purchased instant coffee,” and “the figure was highest/lowest.” Check spelling of city names and avoid describing purchases as drinking.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts several sentence forms, including an overview and clauses introduced by “while” and “however,” but control is weak and errors frequently make relationships between ideas unclear. For example, “The bar graph provides information about the people who bought tea and coffee and Beverage consumption habit five Australia cities” lacks a clear grammatical structure, while “people prefer for go to the cafe” has an incorrect verb pattern. Agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries are also problematic in phrases such as “Melbourne and Hobart cities the highest in cafes” and “After they slightly fell in four cities.” Many statements are fragments rather than complete sentences. Build short, complete sentences first, using accurate past-tense reporting forms such as “The proportion who visited cafés was highest in Melbourne and Hobart,” then add controlled comparisons.

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