Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The bar graph illustrates the information about the proportion of city residents , in regards to their coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five cities in Australia over the previous 4 weeks.

Overall, people shown much interest in visiting cafe for coffee or tea. Melbourne recorded the highest proportion . By contrast, the last favourable option which people considered was purchasing fresh coffee, Brisbane recording the least.

Melbourne experienced at around 64% , in terms of people who visited the cafe . It is by far the highest proportion . Followed by Hobart at around 62% and followed closely by Sydney at approximately 61% . Whereas, people in Adelaide showed least interest in cafe visiting , accounted under 50%.

In regards to instant coffee purchase, Hobart showed the highest proportion, approximately around 53%. Brisbane experienced the second highest number at about 52% . The number of city residents who purchased instant coffee in Adelaide was exactly at 50% . Melbourne and Sydney both recorded under 50%.

Finally, Brisbane and Adelaide showed the lowest value , in regards to fresh coffee purchasement , under 35% . . While Sydney showed highest value followed closely by Melbourne, contributed at around 44% and 42% respectively

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You cover all three survey categories and provide a clear overview: café visits were generally the most popular activity, while fresh coffee purchases were comparatively low. Several comparisons are accurate, including Adelaide’s low café figure and the relatively high fresh-coffee proportions in Sydney and Melbourne. This meets the task well, but some details are inaccurate or imprecise: Melbourne, not Hobart, had the highest café attendance (about 63.5% versus 63%), and Hobart’s instant-coffee figure was about 54.5%, not 53%; Brisbane’s was about 53%, not 52%. The overview also calls Melbourne the highest without acknowledging how close Hobart and Sydney are. More precise reporting and a clearer account of the close results would strengthen the response.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, an overview and separate paragraphs for café visits, instant coffee and fresh coffee. This makes the main categories easy to follow, and linking expressions such as “Overall,” “By contrast” and “Finally” help signal progression. However, the organisation is somewhat mechanical: repeated openings such as “In regards to” and “showed the highest proportion” make the comparisons feel like a list rather than a connected account. Some links are also awkward or unclear, particularly “Followed by Hobart … and followed closely by Sydney,” and the final paragraph’s sentence fragment after “While.” Grouping related highs and lows more smoothly, and using clearer sentence connections, would make the progression more fluent.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use a reasonable range of task-related vocabulary, including “proportion,” “recorded,” “approximately” and “purchasing,” so the chart’s subject is communicated clearly. There are also attempts at more formal phrasing. However, several choices are inaccurate or unnatural for this context: “people shown much interest” is not a natural way to describe survey results, “cafe visiting” is awkward, and “purchasement” is not the appropriate noun. “Experienced” is also repeatedly used for percentages, where “recorded” or “stood at” would be more precise. These choices do not prevent understanding, but they limit naturalness and precision. Aim for standard collocations for describing proportions and use a wider range of accurate comparison language.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of sentence forms, including comparative clauses and longer sentences, and the reader can generally understand the intended comparisons. However, some grammatical errors remain, and several sentences are incomplete or awkwardly constructed. For example, “Overall, people shown much interest” is missing a finite verb, while “Melbourne experienced at around 64%” lacks a clear grammatical subject and verb pattern. The final “While Sydney showed highest value…” is a fragment, and punctuation is inconsistent, with spaces before commas and full stops and a doubled full stop. Articles and sentence structure also need attention in phrases such as “visited the cafe.” More consistently complete sentences and careful proofreading would improve control.

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