Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

This chart show the results about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habitsi n five Austrialian cities which is Sydney,Melbourne,Brisbane,Adelaide and Hobart.

In the city Sydney in last 4 weeks people who bought fresh coffee is 44% and bought instant coffee is 45.5% and people who went to cafe is 61%.In the city Melbourne in last 4 weeks people who bought fresh coffee is 43% and bought instant coffee is 48.5% and people who went to cafe is 62%.In the city Brisbane in last 4 weeks people who bought fresh coffee is 34% and bought instant coffee is 54% and people who went to cafe is 55.5%.In the city Adelaide in last 4 weeks people who bought fresh coffee is 34.5% and bought instant coffee is 50% and people who went to cafe is 49.5%.In the city Hobart in last 4 weeks people who bought fresh coffee is 33.5% and bought instant coffee is 54% and people who went to cafe is 63%.

By the showing this chart we understand the most of the people want to a cafe for coffeeor tea in last 4weeks.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response identifies the chart’s subject and reports figures for all five cities, so it includes relevant information. However, it mainly lists data city by city rather than selecting and summarising the key features. The final statement that most people “want to a cafe” is unclear and does not accurately describe the chart: it shows recent café visits, not preferences, and café attendance is not the highest activity in every city. There are also notable data inaccuracies: Hobart’s fresh-coffee figure is about 38.5%, not 33.5%, and its café figure is about 63%, rather than the response’s 63% (which is accurate); Melbourne’s café figure is about 63.5%, not 62%. A clearer overview and accurate comparisons are needed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The information follows a consistent city-by-city order, which makes it possible to locate each set of figures. However, almost the entire response is presented as one long paragraph, and the repeated pattern “In the city… in last 4 weeks” makes the organisation mechanical rather than showing a clear progression from overview to supporting details. The final sentence is intended as a summary, but “By the showing this chart we understand…” does not connect the data to a clear main trend. Grouping the information into an introduction, an overview, and one or two comparison paragraphs would make the relationships between cities and activities easier to follow. Use linking language to highlight contrasts, not simply to repeat the same sentence frame.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses basic vocabulary relevant to the chart, including “bought fresh coffee,” “instant coffee,” and “went to cafe,” so the reader can generally identify the categories being described. However, the wording is highly repetitive and offers little range for comparing data. Some choices are inaccurate or unnatural: “want to a cafe” suggests preference rather than reported visits, while “By the showing this chart” is not a natural expression. Spelling and spacing problems, such as “Austrialian,” “habitsi n,” and “coffeeor,” also reduce control. Build a small set of accurate reporting phrases, such as “the proportion who visited a café” and “was higher than,” and check spelling and word forms carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response communicates many figures through simple sentence patterns, but its grammatical range is very limited and the same structure is repeated throughout. Errors occur frequently in basic sentence construction and agreement: “This chart show” should be “This chart shows,” and “people who bought fresh coffee is 44%” needs a grammatical subject such as “the figure for people who bought fresh coffee was 44%.” The final sentence, “By the showing this chart we understand…,” is also structurally faulty. Missing or inconsistent punctuation around city names and sentences further affects readability. Practise forming accurate comparison sentences and using past-tense reporting structures, for example, “In Sydney, 44% bought fresh coffee, compared with 45.5% who bought instant coffee.”

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