Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-19
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The chart below demonstrates the coffee buying habits in five different cities in Australia. The data is given in percentage of city residence.
In Sydney, 44% people used to buy fresh coffee in last 4 weeks, although 45% people bought instant coffee in last 4 weeks. While, majority 60% people went to a cafe for coffee or tea in a month.
In Melbourne, around 43% people bought fresh coffee in a month comparatively slightly different from sydney, although people who buy instant coffee rose to 48%. And remaining people who went to a cafe for ready made coffee has significantly increase to 63%.
In Brisbane, the amount of percentage is declining for those who bought fresh coffee to 32%, people who drink instant coffee has sligthly increased as well as for those who drink from a cafe.
In Adelaide, the percentage remains same as brisbane for people who bought fresh coffee, and the other two percentages has slightly decreased for those who bought instant coffee and who went for a cafe for purchase coffee.
At last, in Hobart, again the percentage has slightly increased from as compare to adelaide but from other cities it is still low for people who bought fresh coffee, and the percentage is all time high for those who bought instant coffee, and for those who went for a coffee shop it is slightly low as compare to melbourne.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5
The response covers all five cities and mentions each of the three activities, so the chart is recognisable as its subject. However, it mainly lists city-by-city details rather than selecting and summarising the key patterns, and it gives no clear overall overview. Several comparisons are inaccurate or unclear: café visits are not “slightly low” in Hobart compared with Melbourne (63% versus about 63.5%, a very small difference), while fresh coffee in Hobart is not lower than in other cities, since Sydney and Melbourne are higher but Brisbane and Adelaide are lower. Brisbane’s fresh-coffee figure is about 34.5%, not 32%. To strengthen the response, state the main trends first and report the most important highs and lows accurately.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The city-by-city paragraphing gives the response a basic structure, and the repeated references to fresh, instant and café coffee help readers follow which activities are being discussed. However, the organisation does not build towards a clear summary: there is no overview paragraph identifying the broad patterns, and the sequence of details feels repetitive. Linking words are sometimes used mechanically or inaccurately, such as “although” where a contrast is not clearly expressed and “While,” at the start of a sentence. The final paragraph also combines several comparisons without making their relationships easy to follow. Grouping the main trends across cities, then adding selected comparisons, would create clearer progression and more effective cohesion.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The response uses relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “fresh coffee,” “instant coffee,” “percentage,” and “cafe,” and it attempts to describe change with phrases such as “slightly increased” and “significantly increase.” However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or awkward. For example, “people who drink instant coffee” does not match the chart’s measure of people who bought it, and “ready made coffee” is not an appropriate description of café visits. Phrases such as “the amount of percentage” and “all time high” are also imprecise. Use consistent chart language such as “the proportion of residents who bought…” and “the share who visited a café.”
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
There are attempts to use longer sentences and subordinate clauses, for example, “In Sydney… although…” and “In Brisbane…,” but these structures are often not controlled accurately. Errors include missing articles and plural forms in “44% people,” incorrect verb forms in “has significantly increase,” and agreement problems in “the other two percentages has slightly decreased.” Tense and sentence-boundary choices are also inconsistent, as in “While, majority 60% people…” and “people who buy instant coffee rose.” These errors sometimes make the intended comparison harder to understand. Practise accurate simple reporting structures first, then combine them with correctly formed contrast clauses and consistent past-tense verbs.
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