Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar chart compares the results of a survey about citizen’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

overall, it can be clearly seen that instant coffee useincreased over period.while,fresh coffee followed decreased trend excepy Horbat.cafe for coffee or tea remain unchanged in last four weeks.

Looking first, in sydnen highest ranks for buying was tea 62% and second highest ranks instant coffee45% and last fresh coffee 43%.Furthermore , Melbourne citizen buy in more percent tea63% followed by instant coffee45% least one fresh coffee42%.Brisbane city peoplu baught in large quantity tea55% second used nstant coffee55% again same lowest used fresh coffee.

Turning to Adelaide also same pattern as the other followed.Hobart tea utilization 64% while nstant coffee54% fresh coffee again lower buying rate 38%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the chart’s subject and report several city figures, including café visits as the highest category in Sydney, Melbourne and Hobart. However, the overview is inaccurate: the chart shows café visits were generally the most popular activity, not that fresh coffee declined over time or that café use remained unchanged. The chart compares cities, not changes over a period, and Hobart is not an exception to a fresh-coffee trend. Some figures are also misreported, such as Brisbane instant coffee (about 53%, not 55%) and Melbourne instant coffee (about 49%, not 45%). The response contains 117 words, below the required 150, which limits coverage. Add a clear, accurate overview and compare the main highs and lows.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic structure: an introduction, an attempted overview, and a sequence of city-by-city details. This gives the reader some way to follow the information, and phrases such as “Looking first” and “Turning to Adelaide” signal movement between points. However, there is no clear overall progression from the main patterns to supporting comparisons; the city list is repetitive and the overview does not guide the details. Linking is sometimes inaccurate or awkward, as in “Furthermore” and “also same pattern as the other followed.” Improve the organisation by grouping the main comparisons—for example, café visits versus purchases—and use clear paragraphing and fewer repetitive transitions.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “bar chart,” “survey,” “buying,” “fresh coffee,” and “instant coffee,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make the report difficult to read naturally: “highest ranks for buying,” “tea utilization,” and “baught in large quantity” are not suitable descriptions of survey percentages. There are also spelling errors such as “sydnen,” “Horbat,” “peoplu,” and “nstant,” which reduce clarity. Prefer precise, repeated chart language over invented expressions: say that a percentage of residents “bought” an item or “visited a café.” Check spelling and use “proportion” or “percentage” where appropriate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts simple comparisons and some longer sentences, but grammatical control is weak and errors frequently interrupt the message. For example, “instant coffee useincreased over period” lacks correct spacing, tense and an article, while “fresh coffee followed decreased trend” has an incomplete verb pattern. Agreement and sentence construction are also problematic in “Melbourne citizen buy in more percent tea” and “Brisbane city peoplu baught in large quantity tea.” Capitalisation and punctuation are inconsistent, particularly at the start of sentences and around commas. Build accurate short sentences first, such as “In Sydney, 61% visited a café,” then practise joining comparisons with “while” or “whereas.”

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