Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

This bar chart depicts the information about the survey between the two groups of the Australian cities. This survey is for the people having coffee and tea in five different cities. In the Sydney about 64 percent people went to the cafe for coffee or tea in last four weeks remaining proportion went to the cafe for fresh and instant coffee only. In the Melbourne

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

The response identifies the chart’s general subject and includes one relevant comparison: it reports that about 64% of Sydney residents went to a café, which is close to the chart’s approximate figure. However, it stops while beginning to discuss Melbourne and gives no overview of the main patterns across the five cities or the three activities. The claim that the remaining proportion went to a café for fresh and instant coffee is also inaccurate: those categories refer to buying coffee, not café visits, and the figures cannot be treated as a remainder. The response is therefore only a minimal, incomplete account of the task. It also falls 85 words short of the required minimum. To improve, complete the report and summarise the key highs, lows and contrasts accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is a basic attempt to introduce the chart before giving a detail about Sydney, so the reader can identify the topic and the first city discussed. However, the response has no clear overall progression: it ends abruptly at “In the Melbourne” and does not develop the comparison or organise information into a complete report. The phrase “remaining proportion” also creates an unclear link between café visits and coffee purchases. Use a brief introduction, an overview, and one or two paragraphs grouping the city comparisons. Complete each sentence and use clear links such as “By contrast” or “Meanwhile” only where the data supports them.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary is sufficient to communicate the broad topic, with relevant terms such as “bar chart,” “survey,” “proportion,” and “fresh and instant coffee.” However, the range is limited, and some expressions are imprecise or unnatural for describing chart data. “The information about the survey between the two groups” does not clearly describe the chart, which compares three activities across five cities; “people having coffee and tea” is also vague. The repeated use of “coffee” and “city” reflects the short, undeveloped response. Aim for precise reporting language, such as “the percentage of residents who…” and “the proportion who purchased instant coffee,” while ensuring that the wording matches the chart categories.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response uses mostly simple sentence patterns, with a limited attempt to connect ideas in “In the Sydney about 64 percent people went to the cafe…”. Several grammatical problems make the writing less controlled: “In the Sydney” needs a different preposition and article pattern, and “64 percent people” is missing “of.” The sentence beginning “remaining proportion went…” also lacks an article or possessive determiner, while “In the Melbourne” is an incomplete fragment. These errors do not prevent the reader from understanding the general topic, but the unfinished sentence and repeated basic structures restrict accuracy and range. Practise complete sentences and accurate percentage constructions, for example, “About 64% of Sydney residents visited a café.”

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