Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The bar chart illustrates data of a survey, people who love to drink coffee and tea in Auaterlia amoung 5 cities.

Overall, in given five cities of Austerlia people who went to cafe for coffee or tea were highest in last four weeks, while people who brought fresh coffee in last four weeks were lowest.

In the sydney people who went to cafe to drink cofee or tea were highest about 62% and similar trend was followed by Melbourne, Brisbane and Hobart with the precentage of 66%, 56% and 64% respectively. Although the second larger portion of people in these cities were who brought instant coffee, as followed by highest in hobart and brisbane. additionaly people of these cities who brought fresh cofee ranges from 44% to 34%. On the other side only in the Adelaide there was little bit change in this trend people who brought instant coffee were highest and their precentage was 50%, while people who went to cafe were little bit low of about 1% than who brought intant coffee. People who brought fresh cofee were about 34% only.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the main overall pattern: café visits were generally the most popular activity, while fresh-coffee purchases were usually the least common. You also include relevant city comparisons, such as Sydney’s café figure of about 62% and Adelaide’s higher instant-coffee figure. However, the overview is too broad: fresh coffee was not the lowest category in every city, since in Adelaide café visits were slightly lower than instant purchases but still higher than fresh coffee. Some details are unclear or inaccurate, including Melbourne’s café figure (given as 66% rather than about 63.5%) and the claim that instant coffee was the second-largest category in the cities discussed, which does not hold for Adelaide. A more precise overview and carefully checked comparisons would make the report more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, an overview and a paragraph of comparisons. This helps the reader identify the main subject and broad pattern. However, the body paragraph moves between several cities and categories without a clear organising principle, and the repeated phrase “people who” makes the progression feel mechanical. The sentence beginning “In the sydney” combines figures for four cities, then shifts to instant coffee and fresh coffee before introducing Adelaide with “On the other side.” That transition is not fully clear, and “these cities” has an uncertain reference. Group the cities or activities more systematically, use clearer linking phrases, and make each comparison explicit to improve the flow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant task vocabulary, including “bar chart,” “survey,” “percentage,” and “trend,” so the topic is generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or repetitive. “People who love to drink” suggests preference rather than reported behaviour, while “brought fresh coffee” is not the correct expression for purchasing it; use “bought.” There are also repeated spelling errors, such as “Auaterlia,” “precentage,” “cofee,” and “intant,” which reduce precision. Aim for accurate, neutral reporting language and vary the way you describe proportions and comparisons. Proofreading spelling and choosing standard collocations would make the information easier to follow.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some longer sentences and use comparison structures, for example, “while people who brought fresh coffee… were lowest” and “Although the second larger portion…”. However, these attempts are often faulty, and the response relies heavily on similar sentence patterns. There are frequent problems with articles, agreement and sentence construction: “in given five cities” needs an article, “people … were highest” does not form a clear grammatical comparison, and “the second larger portion of people … were who brought instant coffee” is difficult to parse. The Adelaide sentence also joins several ideas without clear punctuation. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with controlled clauses such as “whereas” and “while.”

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