Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The bar chart illustrates the result of a servey regarding the buying and drinking habits of coffe and tea across five Australian cities: Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane, Adelaide and Hobart.

Overall, buying and consuming coffee in cafes or buying fresh coffee wass consistently more popular than purchasing instant coffee in all five cities. Furthermore, Hobart recorded the highest percenatge of overall engagement in these habits, where as Brisbane and Adelaide generally showed lower figures.

Looking at the details, buying coffee in cafes or buying fresh coffee was practiced by substantial majority in Hobart and Melbourne, at roughly 63% for both cicties. Sydney and Brisbane followed closely, with around 61% and 56% of residents respectively, while Adelaide recorded the lowest proportion of this category at exactly 49%.

In contrast, the proportion of people who bought instant coffee were lower across the board. Hobart again led this category, with nearly 55% of residents purchasing instant coffee. Melbourne followed at approximately 48%, while sydney and Adelaide recorded lower figures of around 46% and 50%. Brisbane registered nearly second highest percentage for instant coffee consumption, at just over 53%. Moreover, buying fresh coffee accouinted highest ratio in Sydney at 44%, and lowest were Brisbane and Adeline, under 35% each.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the three survey categories and provide an overview, which is a useful response to the task. However, the overview misrepresents the main pattern: café visits were the most popular activity in every city, while fresh coffee was not consistently more popular than instant coffee. The detail section also combines café visits and fresh-coffee purchases as if they were one category, leading to inaccurate comparisons—for example, the roughly 63% figure in Hobart and Melbourne refers to café visits, not both activities. Some figures are reported accurately, such as Hobart’s instant-coffee result and Sydney’s fresh-coffee result, but the category confusion and the unclear claim that Hobart had the highest overall engagement leave important features insufficiently clear.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The response has a clear four-paragraph structure: an introduction, an overview, and two paragraphs of detail. Its progression from general patterns to specific figures is easy to follow, and transitions such as “Overall,” “In contrast,” and “Moreover” help signal relationships between points. This logical organisation supports a coherent account. However, the detail paragraph groups café visits and fresh-coffee purchases together, then shifts between categories, so the reader cannot always tell which figures belong to which activity. The final paragraph also moves from instant coffee back to fresh coffee without a clear organising principle. Grouping the data consistently by activity, or comparing cities within each activity, would make the progression more controlled.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of task-related vocabulary, including “proportion,” “recorded,” “purchasing,” and “approximately,” and the meaning is generally clear. There are also attempts at more formal phrasing, such as “overall engagement” and “substantial majority.” However, some choices are inaccurate or awkward: “buying coffee in cafes” does not clearly express visiting a café for coffee or tea, and “instant coffee consumption” changes the chart’s measure from buying to consuming. Several spelling errors—“servey,” “coffe,” “percenatge,” “cicties,” and “accouinted”—also reduce accuracy. Use precise labels from the chart and check spelling; this would make the vocabulary more reliable and appropriate for data description.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.5

You use a mix of simple and more complex sentence forms, including the overview sentence beginning “Furthermore” and the contrast introduced by “In contrast.” Most sentences remain understandable, and errors rarely prevent the reader from following the intended meaning. Some grammatical control is still uneven. For example, “the proportion of people who bought instant coffee were lower” has a subject–verb agreement error (“proportion … was”), while “the lowest were Brisbane and Adeline” has an unclear plural construction. The phrase “where as” should be written as one word, “whereas.” There is also inconsistent punctuation and spacing. More careful agreement and sentence editing would help you retain your range while making the writing more accurate.

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