Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In the given graph we have an information about the analysis of tea and coffee buying and drinking in five different cities in

Australlia. on y-axis of graph there is an information about persentage of city residents and on the x-axis the name the name of five difference cities of Australia are given.

Sydney:

Sydney bought approximately 44% fresh coffee in last four weeks.On the same side Sydney bought 45% instant coffee in last 4 weeks and approximately 60% people went to a caffee for coffee or a tea in last 4 weeks respectively.this is all about the Sydney city.

Melbourne:

In Melbourne about 41%person bought fresh coffee in last four weeks and approximately 49% persons bought instant coffee in last four weeks and about 64% consumers went to a cafe for coffee or a tea in last four weeks.

Brisbane:

in this city 34% buyers bought fresh coffee and 53% people instant coffee and 55% consumers went to a cafe for coffee or tea in last 4 weeks respectively.

Adelaide:

in this city same case is apply some bought instant and some bought fresh coffee and some consumer fullfill their needs by went to a cafe.

Hobart:

Hobart was quite different about 34% people bought fresh coffee and 54% people bought instant coffee and the rest peoples approximately 62% went to a cafee and enjoye their coffee.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the three activities and report several figures that broadly match the chart, including Sydney’s fresh-coffee and instant-coffee results and the high café attendance in Melbourne and Hobart. However, the response mainly lists cities separately rather than summarising the main features or making meaningful comparisons. There is no clear overview of the overall pattern—for example, café visits are generally the most popular activity, while fresh coffee purchases are usually the least popular. Adelaide is especially under-reported: “some” people did each activity gives no usable figures or comparisons. Hobart’s fresh-coffee figure is also misreported as about 34%, rather than approximately 38.5%. Select key patterns, give an overview, and support it with accurate comparisons.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The city labels and repeated order of activities make it possible to follow which figures belong to Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane, Adelaide and Hobart. However, the response has little overall progression: it moves through five isolated mini-sections without an introduction that paraphrases the task or a concluding overview that draws the comparisons together. Repeated phrases such as “in last four weeks” and “in this city” make the organisation mechanical, while “respectively” is used where no clear paired list requires it. The Adelaide section also interrupts the pattern by giving no figures. Grouping cities by shared trends, and using clear links such as “by contrast” or “whereas,” would create a more coherent summary.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant task vocabulary, including “fresh coffee,” “instant coffee,” “percentage,” “consumers” and “approximately,” so the reader can generally understand the subject and figures. However, the range is limited and some word choices or collocations are inaccurate or repetitive. “An information” is not a natural expression, “same case is apply” is unclear, and “fullfill their needs by went to a cafe” does not describe the chart naturally. There are also spelling errors such as “Australlia,” “persentage,” “caffee” and “enjoye.” Use precise reporting language and check spelling; for example, describe residents as “visited a café” rather than saying they “enjoyed their coffee,” which adds an unsupported detail.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts some complete sentences and uses basic past-tense reporting, such as “Sydney bought approximately 44% fresh coffee.” However, sentence structures are mostly simple and repetitive, and frequent errors affect accuracy. The opening contains faulty constructions (“we have an information” and “the name the name”), while “in this city same case is apply” has incorrect word order and verb form. Other problems include missing articles and spaces in “41%person,” inconsistent capitalisation at the start of sentences, and run-on punctuation after “respectively.” Practise accurate comparative sentences, such as “In Sydney, café visits were more common than purchases of either type of coffee,” and check articles, verb forms and sentence boundaries.

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